Oh! Oh! I absolutely love the last line. It just...brings everything together so perfectly.
*takes a deep breath, and goes back to reread*
I like it all, there's nothing that I can't say something about. So I will. But not right now. Because I have to sleep. Expect a much better and more coherant comment in the morning. Or well, afternoon, depending on if I can wake up early enough before class to write you one. OMGILOVEYOU.
Okay, I couldn't wait, so I'm commenting before I sleep. XD. OMG it's 2 am I have class tomorrow! But alas! YuyaKame wins all!
"So what's up with the oranges?" Kame asked slowly, as he shifted beneath Yuya, his motion eliciting a non-verbal, "Mmmf," of appreciation.
*grins* a non-verbal mmf of appreciation. That is just too cute for words. I can so totally see it too, so much love.
"What?" Yuya replied as he finished depositing kisses on Kame's closed, trembling eyelids.
I love this image too. You are so good with these descriptions. *imagines blissfully*
"The whole apartment smells like oranges."
"Oh. That."
So freaking cute. I don't know why, but that is just so YuyaKame and the quintessence of their adorableness. They were lying together on the couch in the living room, sunlight covering them in warmth, while steaming cups of tea languished on the table by the kitchen. Yuya was messily but comfortably sprawled against Kame, one leg thrown over his hip, and Kame no longer remembered how they had ended up here. He distantly
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Kame nodded, lips parted in anticipation. His skin literally hummed with a buzzing sensation that spread from his scalp to his fingertips, and his hands itched to hold Yuya close to him and for them both to simply melt into the couch. Then he felt something wet brush his mouth and a sweet bright, citrusy taste exploded over his tongue. He opened his mouth a little wider as Yuya deposited a broken section of fruit into his mouth. Kame smiled as he chewed slowly and swallowed, but Yuya's fingers lingered on his mouth, stroking juice liberally over and around his lips with citrus-wet fingers.
*fans self harder* Somehow, this is really really erotic. I totally get what you were saying about fruit and sexy and mmmm, *melts* "Clementines," Yuya said softly, and Kame opened his eyes to find Yuya staring down at him with an odd, tender expression. "Not just oranges. They're clementines." He bent his head slowly and began to lick at Kame's mouth
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"Stop what?" Kame asked innocently as one of his hands disappeared up Yuya's pajama top and found a sensitive spot on the body that so resembled his own. Yuya pushed another morsel of cake at Kame's lips, but he was beginning to squirm against Kame's hips from the teasing brush of a single thumb, flicking at him.
Your descriptions, your words, the way they all flow together and through each other so elegantly and Kame. Kame being so ridiculously cute and Yuya being so nurturing and so ridiculously naughty as well, *just dies* I adore you.
"That," Yuya answered, and then gasped while Kame grinned up at him, satisfied as Yuya's eyes squeezed shut.
I really love this line too. Just. Nice. Simple, and sweet, and so much depth of their relationship is just felt in simple lines like these. God, I love it. You're a genius. "Mmmm," Kame said with a tiny smile. "Is it me, or is it getting hot in here?" He reached one arm to the coffee table where Yuya had cake and clementine sections arranged on a plate. He plucked a single section and bit
( ... )
Ahhhh! I am incoherent from the sweetness and hotness of this. It's so beautiful, I am in awe. This is such a weird pairing but it fits so perfect, I don't know what to say. Perfect morning read. *goes to work with a big smile*
I'm glad you thought that it was sweet and hot - I wasn't sure when I finished it if I was effective in that respect. For never having written slash before, I'm really enjoying it with these boys, and I like playing with sweet/hot, innocent/naughty, etc.
I'm so thrilled that this made you smile! :D That's the most wonderful thing to hear. Thank you so much, ina!
I don't know that it can't last forever...I love them, so I want more fic with this pair, even if it means I have to write it myself (if anyone else wants to play with Yuya/Kame, PLEASE DO!). I'm really glad you like this, and I promise, if I have another fic in me, you shall see it. :) Thank you so much for your comments!
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*takes a deep breath, and goes back to reread*
I like it all, there's nothing that I can't say something about. So I will. But not right now. Because I have to sleep. Expect a much better and more coherant comment in the morning. Or well, afternoon, depending on if I can wake up early enough before class to write you one. OMGILOVEYOU.
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"So what's up with the oranges?" Kame asked slowly, as he shifted beneath Yuya, his motion eliciting a non-verbal, "Mmmf," of appreciation.
*grins* a non-verbal mmf of appreciation. That is just too cute for words. I can so totally see it too, so much love.
"What?" Yuya replied as he finished depositing kisses on Kame's closed, trembling eyelids.
I love this image too. You are so good with these descriptions. *imagines blissfully*
"The whole apartment smells like oranges."
"Oh. That."
So freaking cute. I don't know why, but that is just so YuyaKame and the quintessence of their adorableness.
They were lying together on the couch in the living room, sunlight covering them in warmth, while steaming cups of tea languished on the table by the kitchen. Yuya was messily but comfortably sprawled against Kame, one leg thrown over his hip, and Kame no longer remembered how they had ended up here. He distantly ( ... )
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"Just wait."
Kame nodded, lips parted in anticipation. His skin literally hummed with a buzzing sensation that spread from his scalp to his fingertips, and his hands itched to hold Yuya close to him and for them both to simply melt into the couch. Then he felt something wet brush his mouth and a sweet bright, citrusy taste exploded over his tongue. He opened his mouth a little wider as Yuya deposited a broken section of fruit into his mouth. Kame smiled as he chewed slowly and swallowed, but Yuya's fingers lingered on his mouth, stroking juice liberally over and around his lips with citrus-wet fingers.
*fans self harder* Somehow, this is really really erotic. I totally get what you were saying about fruit and sexy and mmmm, *melts*
"Clementines," Yuya said softly, and Kame opened his eyes to find Yuya staring down at him with an odd, tender expression. "Not just oranges. They're clementines." He bent his head slowly and began to lick at Kame's mouth ( ... )
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Your descriptions, your words, the way they all flow together and through each other so elegantly and Kame. Kame being so ridiculously cute and Yuya being so nurturing and so ridiculously naughty as well, *just dies* I adore you.
"That," Yuya answered, and then gasped while Kame grinned up at him, satisfied as Yuya's eyes squeezed shut.
I really love this line too. Just. Nice. Simple, and sweet, and so much depth of their relationship is just felt in simple lines like these. God, I love it. You're a genius.
"Mmmm," Kame said with a tiny smile. "Is it me, or is it getting hot in here?" He reached one arm to the coffee table where Yuya had cake and clementine sections arranged on a plate. He plucked a single section and bit ( ... )
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This is such a weird pairing but it fits so perfect, I don't know what to say. Perfect morning read. *goes to work with a big smile*
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I'm so thrilled that this made you smile! :D That's the most wonderful thing to hear. Thank you so much, ina!
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SQUEEOMGAWESOMENESS. That was such a perfect end. I THINK I LOVE YOU TOO K. XD
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I love the story...and it's ending!
I don't know that it can't last forever...I love them, so I want more fic with this pair, even if it means I have to write it myself (if anyone else wants to play with Yuya/Kame, PLEASE DO!). I'm really glad you like this, and I promise, if I have another fic in me, you shall see it. :) Thank you so much for your comments!
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And yes, there just had to be food. I see food as an intrinsic part of the relationship between these two. :D
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