Prince Charming

[tasume521]

            You know this. Hell, you lived it. But the thought still pains you. The ache is usually bearable-- a nagging little tug in your chest-but it blooms into something dark and brooding when you look at her lying next to you, fathomless eyes closed to the world, a small frown twisting her lips.

You know that she’s dreaming. And when her

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[lilian413]

*stares*

You wrote this in an hour?? *boggles* I can't wait to read what you may write in the day, then, because this was one of the most moving pieces of fic I've ever read.

The door shuts with a soft click-she would never slam it-and it’s the loneliest sound that you’ve ever heard.

Oh, Zoi! *cries*

You want another and ask the bartender what you’re drinking. It’s called a Happily Ever After, and you laugh until you cry.

I wish I could write like this, I really do. It's so-- so perfect, and it breaks my heart just reading it.

You know she deserves one, just as you know that you can’t be that for her.

Seriously, are you trying to kill me? Because I'm gonna spend the next few HOURS picking up the pieces of myself after reading that line.

This was really, really, REALLY good. And even though you said the couple wasn't specifically Ami/Zoi, I still put them in the story (they're my favourite couple as well), and it just-- it hurt to read. But in a good way. :-)

[tasume521]

thank you!

I know that I said that this wasn't couple specific, but I guess that when I re-read it this morning, I couldn't get Ami/Zoi out of my mind either.

I'm glad you like it ^^

[charliechaplin2]

*whimper* Zoi, why are you so sad! *breaks down in tears*

I loved the Happily Ever After, nice touch!

Does this mean that because it only took you an hour to write you can do more of them? *hint hint nudge nudge*

[tasume521]

*hands you a tissue* I'm sorry!

I was particularly happy with the Happily Ever After part, thank you ^^

perhaps...I'm working on a piece right now expanding Ami and Zoi's first meeting as I described it in Rain Song.

I'm glad you like it!

[elianthos]

*misty-eyed* aww... the prettiness. hat off to you. Written VERY well, and in such a little time too. I'm envious. And thankful. This piece rang 'AmixZoi' to me too. Well done. And the very last line is great. *claps hands*

[tasume521]

thank you~

[dhoney]

Awww, I wanna give him a hug! Very nicely done.

Ditto on the "loneliest sound" & "happily ever after." Those lines were beautiful.

[tasume521]

thank you v. much~

I was really happy with the Happily Ever After part myself. I was going to change it to Prince Charming or White Horse or something (to fit the title a little closer) but I didn't want to edit and those choices didn't seem right.