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shingo_sama

The Rain Parts 2-5

Feb 22, 2006 16:24

Title- The Rain

Paring- Roy/Ed

Rating- T-M

Summery- He even concidered the young blonde as a pup of his team at one point in time. Now, he didn't really see the blonde as anything special. Just something he can used and to be used by him. Riza frowned disapprovingly at him as he walked into his office with Edward in tow behind him. He didn't really ( Read more... )

Comments 16

sleepingsun February 22 2006, 22:38:56 UTC

I really like this story ♥ It's so sad....but cute at the same time.

There is quite a few typos and such; if you need a beta I wouldn't mind doing it :D

shingo_sama February 23 2006, 20:54:39 UTC

Yay! I'm glad you liked it! XD Marie's just taking her time, I'll have the betaed verson up eventually XD

golden_heretic February 23 2006, 01:21:31 UTC

That was really good, and thank you so much for reposting the 2nd chapter. I was about to cry because I couldn't read it.

Your writing is very good, yes some typo's but nothing to bad. My fanfics would be a total mess with out my beta *glomps her beta*

I was just wondering, is this the end or will there be more??? This is so sad but really good. Poor Ed.

shingo_sama February 23 2006, 20:53:54 UTC

You're wellcome! I'm sorry it was so hard to read!!! There might be more, it all depends on how I feel, but I think there might be!

golden_heretic February 23 2006, 20:55:36 UTC

*claps* More would be awesome ... ^_^

shingo_sama February 23 2006, 20:56:51 UTC

Lmao, okay, maybe after I finish part three of my other story

akari_hayashi February 23 2006, 05:34:03 UTC

Oh wow, this story is getting really good... It's so bitter sweet, it's making me cry. Poor things, both Roy and Ed. But at least now they have each other. Glad the underlining problem is solved. ^^

shingo_sama February 23 2006, 20:55:40 UTC

Lmao You're the only one that didn't comment on the spelling mistakes! Thanks!! Thank you for your help with the HTML! It's evil ....XD

syunikissd February 23 2006, 12:27:12 UTC

corrections in chapter 2:

Of course work meant Riza, and Riza was a threat within itself. That and paperwork was probably one of the many reasons why he hated his job. He buttoned up the navy unifrom and buckled the cape that flowed around his legs as he usually wore his uniform.
Though it never helped because his hair had a mind of its own when he didn't have gel or hairhold in his hair. He exited the bathroom after puting on some Cologne from a small glass jar bottle.
He grabbed a hold of the blonde's delicate ankles and roughly pulled him off the bed.
He brushed off any invisible crumbs that were on him and got up.
HE guessed that the cold shoulder from his colleagues were going to be expected.
He even considered the young blonde as a pup of his team at one point in time.
She guess that she really shouldn't have given the General the cold shoulder after he technically saved Edward's life..
She felt something knot in her heart as she stared down at Edward who sat by Roy's desk like a loyal dog to its master.
Too bad she was ( ... )

shingo_sama February 23 2006, 20:56:20 UTC

lmao, XD thanks, I'm glad you like it! heheh I'd never give out little secrets like that XD

syunikissd February 25 2006, 01:25:23 UTC

awwww v_v

master_of_yaoi February 23 2006, 15:15:51 UTC

Wow. I wish I could write like you.

Anyways, these were really good chapters. Is there going to be more?

Yipee. Awesome/

shingo_sama February 23 2006, 21:01:13 UTC

Awww thanks! *Huggles* You're so sweet, I'll defentally think about writing more!