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SSS 2010: for sol_tama

Dec 31, 2010 23:52

For: sol_tama
From: Your (Emergency) Secret Santa

Title: Eye of the Fox
Pairing: Onew/Key
Rating: PG-13
Wordcount: 5,453
Summary: Wherein Jinki has magic and Kibum decides to be his familiar.

( On the night he was born a storm raged outside that his mother’s midwife claimed bore ill will and misfortune for him for years to come. )

*2010, pairing: onew/key, rating: pg-13

Comments 8

lovescone January 1 2011, 08:12:07 UTC

this was absolutely adorable, oh my god. sldkfjslkdfjs ♥♥

yunho January 2 2011, 05:27:34 UTC

Thank you so much! Gaah reading through it, I can't help but cringe at all the ugly typos but I was super rushed to get this done, negl. I'm so glad you liked it, thank you very much! ♥

sol_tama January 2 2011, 02:03:48 UTC

asdfghjkl I LOVE THIS.

I love the world you fleshed out, it has so much magic and it's just absolutely wonderful. The scenes at the beginning, when Jinki's powers start to become more evident and his mother struggles to keep it all a secret... It was all thought through and added a lot to the story, imo. Jonghyun as the obnoxious barkeeper, it made me laugh. waylt, Jjong. ):

It was all pretty much perfect till this point, but the beast auction was one of my favorite scenes. I wasn't expecting Kibum to be a magical creature and the thought of him being a fox, it's just so oddly fitting.

The boy said his name as though tasting the words for himself, looking thoughtful. “My name is Kibum. I’ve lived 17 summers.”This had me rolling a bit, because I can picture Kibum being all ~regal and magical~ while saying that, and the last scene is just pure win on all accounts. I do appreciate Kibum being naked on Jinki's lap btw, I mean what. ;___ ( ... )

yunho January 2 2011, 05:32:14 UTC

Aww thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked it! I'm so sorry for all the hideous typos but I was pressed for time (I stupidly put this off 'til the last possible second) so barely had time to do a once over before submitting. It actually isn't even all that I wanted to write, I'll probably add more because the ending was a bit rushed >_>

Key would be a fox, wouldn't he? ;) I think I remember reading an article where they chose animals for each member and I thiiink Key was a fox (but I could be wrong!) so maybe that's where my brain came up with it? lol

Thank you again, I'm happy you liked it and I hope the rest of your holidays go well! ♥

lunayeppeo January 2 2011, 07:47:27 UTC

This was wonderful! I really really adored it. Jinki and his mother were really sweet, and it was a little sad to see him leave his mother but go out anyway, determined to learn something. And how he saved Kibum! And Kibum, ready to sprint away but coming back for Jinki!

I really really hope there'll be more to this universe in the future. This was lovely. ;~;

playingods January 3 2011, 09:36:17 UTC

Wow. This is so good! I love it so much ♥

caitlinonkey April 5 2011, 22:27:50 UTC

This is perfect omg
I can't get over the cuteness, the characterization is adorable and lovely, they are so cute together, and key is so fox like, this is seriously genius!!

Are you possibly planning to continue this story...?