OMG LOOKIT THAT TWIST! *dies* *still has no idea what really happened but is deeead*
Dude, this is exactly every single thing I love in a RenIchi non-fetishy sex scene. You got the voices, the hair, the possessive!Renji, the aggressiveness, and, of course, the marks. And you got it down. I fucking love this thing, I do I do. It's even more amazing considering it's your first.
*continues to die*
Psst, I spotted some typos, but that's just me being finicky. Want a beta? :P
What the Hell, that was your FIRST!? oh my, I hope you keep on writing then. and, what the fuck happened? how could...shit. I'm suspecting a sleep walker and a deep dreamer... >_
I try to write more. This is one-shot for. I might add more to the story later. Asfor what happened, I'm leaving that open. Or maybe I could ramble on about a deep connection between the two or something.
Very nice post. They say the first time is always the most difficult, but I think you did a good job. I really liked the wealth of detail, and the interaction between the two...oh, hell my evil alter ego, the sex tipster, wants to speak up. I'll be back in a moment...
From my...er...personal research, as well as consultation of available expert advice, the method you describe for preventing a guy from coming is unlikely to work. Want to know what will? OK, give this a try. You may have noticed (assuming you weren't otherwise distracted) that when a guy gets ready to come, his balls draw up near to his body. If you want the fun to keep going for a while longer, wrap your thumb and first finger around the base of his balls and gently (OK, I mean gently, this is NOT the time for the iron fist of death) pull them back away from his body.
Hmm...well, anyway, I really liked the twist at the end, and I want to see more of this story. I'd like to see what happens when they get together for real. : )
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Dude, this is exactly every single thing I love in a RenIchi non-fetishy sex scene. You got the voices, the hair, the possessive!Renji, the aggressiveness, and, of course, the marks. And you got it down. I fucking love this thing, I do I do. It's even more amazing considering it's your first.
*continues to die*
Psst, I spotted some typos, but that's just me being finicky. Want a beta? :P
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I hope to see more from you!
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With love,
Yukiim
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From my...er...personal research, as well as consultation of available expert advice, the method you describe for preventing a guy from coming is unlikely to work. Want to know what will? OK, give this a try. You may have noticed (assuming you weren't otherwise distracted) that when a guy gets ready to come, his balls draw up near to his body. If you want the fun to keep going for a while longer, wrap your thumb and first finger around the base of his balls and gently (OK, I mean gently, this is NOT the time for the iron fist of death) pull them back away from his body.
Hmm...well, anyway, I really liked the twist at the end, and I want to see more of this story. I'd like to see what happens when they get together for real. : )
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