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The Case of the Escaped Death Eater, Chapter 4

Sep 29, 2009 21:35

Title: The Case of the Escaped Death Eater
Author: shiiki
Rating: PG-13
Characters/Pairings: Ron Weasley/Hermione Granger, Neville Longbottom/Hannah Abbott, various others
Fandom: Harry Potter

Summary: Five years after the end of the war, Aurors Weasley and Longbottom find themselves working together to capture an escaped prisoner on a tight deadline: ( Read more... )

the case of the escaped death eater

Comments 6

vegablack62 September 29 2009, 14:08:46 UTC

Another wonderful installment and it features Neville! Keep them coming. I love how you are setting up Neville and Hannah's relationship.

I found Neville's thoughts on Greyback interesting. I always wondered what take him down meant, if they killed him or how it meant.

shiiki September 30 2009, 10:39:03 UTC

Thanks! I do love Neville. It's always a treat to write him.

I'm not sure as well whether JKR meant that Greyback was dead in DH, but I decided to go with the captured but not killed definition here ... else I wouldn't have much of a story! :)

vegablack62 September 30 2009, 13:36:38 UTC

No, you need a villain and keeping Greyback alive serves an excellent purpose. I liked how you wrote the events. The way JKR kept it ambiguous (which I think she did for a purpose) makes it hard to picture what happened and turn it into something real. You did a good job without being graphic.

vegablack62 September 29 2009, 14:17:08 UTC

I forgot to add this. Poor McKay! He didn't volunteer to become a werewolf or to be killed.

shiiki September 30 2009, 10:39:55 UTC

I know. Poor guy just served a plot point for me, but I did treat him quite terribly!

vegablack62 September 30 2009, 13:35:04 UTC

You have to treat characters poorly to have a story. That's why writers are so mean.

I feel sorry for his loss of reputation. He didn't want to be a werewolf. The guards must have been frightened of guarding greyback during the full moons. Having him biting him on the finger was a good touch.