Comments | shieldmaid1: Going Down, Chapter Two: Sand Through My Fingers

shieldmaid1

Going Down, Chapter Two: Sand Through My Fingers

Sep 23, 2006 12:01

Pairing: Ennis/Jack ( Read more... )

Comments 9

luvjacknasty September 23 2006, 16:47:12 UTC

I'm really liking this story. It is beautifully written. I already posted some of my favorite lines over at EnnisJack but they bear repeating:

That kind of wide open space and high wind always brought Jack’s hands home to Ennis’s body, his lust whipped on by the air blowing over their bare bodies and the warmth generated in their own private pocket of the world’s terrain.

...the clear honesty of Jack’s eyes tangling the skeins of all the truths he’d thought he knew. That was him, all right. Tangled up in blue.

I'm looking forward to more. =)

shieldmaid1 September 25 2006, 19:38:17 UTC

Thank you!! Glad you are reading and enjoying. I'm hard at work on chapter three, which should be finished soon. Hope to see you here again! :)

poppyhoney_67 September 24 2006, 13:02:58 UTC

This really was a beautifully written chapter. Its very poetic in its descriptive prose, and I feel like I am using all my senses when reading it, its very evocative of the time, the place, the elements, and the strained atmosphere between Ennis and Jack. I like too, to get inside Ennis' head and know that he is wanting to tell Jack all those things that he keeps hidden deep inside himself. I really felt for him though, to have finally got the courage to say them, only for Jack to be asleep! I thought it was very sweet though, that he continued to talk to Jack, making the words real.

Am really looking forward to the next chapter!

shieldmaid1 September 25 2006, 19:39:10 UTC

Thanks!! for all your support. I'm having such a good time with this story. Please keep reading--Ennis and Jack need you! ;)

Read on ennisjack.com about yours ousoonerfan September 26 2006, 04:21:50 UTC

Cant wait for more.

Love the two of them so much. Will always wants stories about them..

Hope you somehow keep them together and ALIVE.

Thanks, C

Re: Read on ennisjack.com about yours shieldmaid1 October 6 2006, 14:32:10 UTC

Don't worry; things will work out somehow in the end. That's one fact that keeps me writing. Thanks for reading--I look forward to hearing more as the story goes on.

midget_size October 1 2006, 19:02:46 UTC

When his eyes were closed, Ennis felt a crack splinter in his chest, missing their blue as deep as a western twilight, but the pain was worth the always fresh surprise of seeing that blue reappear, the clear honesty of Jack’s eyes tangling the skeins of all the truths he’d thought he knew.

Holy cow, that line was wonderful! Agh, why did Jack have to fall asleep at the end? Sheesh. It's a good thing chapter three is already posted, or else I might die. I don't know what I'll do after I finish that one!

shieldmaid1 October 6 2006, 14:32:48 UTC

Thank you!! It's hard to describe Jack's eyes in a way that hasn't been done before . . . but I owe it to him to try. :)

onefreetoroam May 3 2007, 19:40:03 UTC

"...pain was worth the always fresh surprise of seeing that blue reappear...", hope Ennis realizes that if he doesn't do something soon, he might not see the blue reappear!

OMG, Ennis telling Jack that he loves him and Jack passed out - if that dosn't beat all. Sad thing is Ennis won't probably admit it again.

Thanks for the story.