Believing the Lies

Nov 19, 2009 19:21

BELIEVING THE LIES ( Read more... )

hwmnbn, writing, lj idol

Leave a comment

Comments 22

imafarmgirl November 20 2009, 02:52:42 UTC
Nice piece. I really like this one especially how it turned out when finished.

Reply


shazza59 November 20 2009, 05:54:31 UTC
Oh my Heavens Sherry! If any piece of writing could reach inside someone and wrench the heart right out of a chest, this one does. Oh my, I just can't find any more words. But my heart is not in my chest anymore. What a fabulous piece.

Reply


shadowwolf13 November 20 2009, 07:31:08 UTC
This is a good piece. However, it would be easier to read if you had a blank line between each paragraph. Without it the words tend to run together and be harder to follow.

Reply

sherriola November 20 2009, 14:47:00 UTC
Thank you so much for reminding me about the blank lines! I meant to do that, but I was so exhausted after writing it all day I forgot. and when I read it back with my screen reader, it doesn't read blank lines, so I completely forgot. If anyone who's commented on the need for blank lines could look it over and tell me if it's better now, that would be awesome. I don't have to repost the link or anything do I? Thank you again so much. This was, well, no coffee yet, so can't think of the word, important, special, anyway, a meaningful piece to me, and I don't want people to be turned off from the content because of the format. Hugs for pointing out the problem to me! Really.

Reply

shadowwolf13 November 20 2009, 22:30:04 UTC
Much easier to read! :)

Reply


alephz November 20 2009, 11:21:14 UTC
I second shadowwolf13 on this. An extra page break between paragraphs would do wonders.

Reply

rattsu November 20 2009, 11:33:32 UTC
Thirded!

Are you writing your posts in another program then pasting them in here? I get this problem sometimes if I don't double check, at times the formatting just gets weird.

Reply


creature_girl08 November 21 2009, 00:25:34 UTC
Wow, girl, this is really powerful stuff. I am really sorry you went through this. I know people can be this awful and cruel but hearing of it just makes me sad for people like you who went through it and live with it the rest of your life.

Really excellent entry.

Reply


Leave a comment

Up