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Fic - Wild Blue

Mar 09, 2011 20:55

Title: Wild Blue
Author: Padawan_aneiki
Rating/Pairing: PG/None
Characters: Sheppard and an OC
Summary: Below-Ground Myrin encounters Outsider Sheppard, who dares her to dream of more than freedom, but of the stars above.

( Wild Blue )

author-padawan_aneiki, fiction-john

Comments 11

anonymous March 10 2011, 04:31:38 UTC

Very nice! Poor bear. *gives him huggles* It's nice to see it from another point of view. Especially one born into slavery like that. Imagine the wonder of seeing stars for the first time. And with someone as hot as Shep. ;D

Excellent!

padawan_aneiki March 10 2011, 13:37:35 UTC

Glad you liked it. :) The writing braincells are a little rusty and they got a push thanks to KLN1671. ;) We'll see if that's got the ball rolling now. ;)

kriadydragon March 10 2011, 04:49:06 UTC

That was wonderful. Very lovely and poignant. Love your OC and Sheppard inspiring her with his own wonder and hope. Excellent. Just excellent :D

padawan_aneiki March 10 2011, 13:41:17 UTC

*beams* Thank you! I wasn't entirely sure how well this came out as it's been a little while. :) Glad you enjoyed it. :)

Sheppard can be pretty inspiring... ;) lol

nesabj March 10 2011, 17:36:07 UTC

That was lovely. Your writing is lyrical and your OC is very well realized. I'm so happy to see some new SGA fan fics. I hope for more!

padawan_aneiki March 11 2011, 13:14:27 UTC

Thank you very much. I'm hoping my brain will cooperate for more, too! lol Glad you enjoyed it. :)

annieb1955 March 10 2011, 18:40:10 UTC

That's wonderful. Beautifully written. love your OCs and your Sheppard.

padawan_aneiki March 11 2011, 13:16:03 UTC

Thank you! :D Glad you enjoyed it, Annie dear. :) 'Tis fun to play in the sandbox every now and then. ;)

tridget March 12 2011, 15:44:16 UTC

A lovely story. Beautifully written with an almost poetic feel to it. I am especially fond of the opening:

"He’s different, this one that walks among us, even now, even when he can barely raise his head to acknowledge the Taskmaster. There is far less defiance in the hazel eyes now, but I can still see it, that baleful flicker that says you do not own me, but he knows as we all do that to rebel is to invite pain, or worse…sacrifice to the Wraith."

It really drew me in and set the tone for your story and your OC. Very compelling.

You used the OC POV very effectively to tell the tale. Ah, such a touching ending, too.

padawan_aneiki March 14 2011, 14:56:23 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) I had a lot of fun writing it as I've had a HUGE dry spell in the writing department lately.

I like other folks' POV's on John, be it from the perspective of one of his team, or someone from the expedition at large, or an OC like this, someone they encounter in Pegasus. It just adds another layer to the richness of the character, I think, to see him through someone else's eyes. :)

Thanks again!