Very nice. I love stories set in the first season while everyone was still getting to know each other, and with Rodney there were bound to be times when people didn't know how to handle his personality. I think you showed that very well here, and I'd like to read a sequel about what happens following the episode if you ever feel the desire to write it. Thanks! :)
This works really well -- of course John is going to downplay his illness at first, and Rodney's not going to be derailed by anything short of a sledgehammer. And it's really interesting to see John actually comparing his role to the others -- of course they need him, but it makes perfect sense that he wouldn't believe it yet. Nicely done.
Lovely little fic! I love your idea of it leading directly into the episode. Don't see many do that, and the lead in was absolutely perfectly done.
I love the dialogue. It was well done, flowed naturally, and I could hear them speaking in my head. I also thought you portrayed John's self doubts well. A nice mix of strength of character and fragility.
wow. I didn't read the notes at the beginning, just dove in, so I had no idea this was a lead-in for the Storm episode until I read the very last lines...I was feeling heart-sore for John's sense of displacement, and how everyone seemed to have a real purpose, and then whoa! bang. gut shot. (I thought you were going to leave me on a whimper. :)
very very nicely done, from start to finish. I especially liked the way John let it go and patched things up with Rodney, because yeah, friends say shit they don't mean, and Rodney was exhausted and cranky and obviously just being manipulative to get his way. He apologized, and John accepted, and that was a really great friend moment, layered over John's depression.
what a great story! wow again: the ending is just terrific! hee.
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I've gotten other requests for a sequel. . . *puts on thinking cap*
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I love the dialogue. It was well done, flowed naturally, and I could hear them speaking in my head. I also thought you portrayed John's self doubts well. A nice mix of strength of character and fragility.
Really, really, nice. Thank you.
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very very nicely done, from start to finish. I especially liked the way John let it go and patched things up with Rodney, because yeah, friends say shit they don't mean, and Rodney was exhausted and cranky and obviously just being manipulative to get his way. He apologized, and John accepted, and that was a really great friend moment, layered over John's depression.
what a great story! wow again: the ending is just terrific! hee.
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