Infection Tag

[seramercury]

Title: Stray Bullets
Rating: G
Author: seramercury
Characters: John, Jennifer, Rodney, Lorne

Comments

[vita_candeo]

Aw, poor John :( But yeah for whumping him :D This was well done!

The only this I found was: "... so bed after..." I think you mean "bad" not "bed" :) (We all make little typos!)

[seramercury]

Ooh, thanks! *goes to fix typo*

Stray Bullets by searmercury

[sgafan33]

A couple of betas, if you don't mind:

-"John, you don't look so well." This isn't Teyla's way of speaking. She's more formal. She would phrase the sentence something like, "John, you are looking unwell."

- "Besides I highly think..." I believe you meant "hardly think" here.