Comments | sheelock: Fourth Annual OC Sentence Fiction Challenge #2

sheelock

Fourth Annual OC Sentence Fiction Challenge #2

Sep 16, 2007 10:11

Here's my second story - again for

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Comments 17

fredsmith518 September 18 2007, 21:06:48 UTC

enjoyed reading this insight into Lindsay - glad she decided to reclaim the friendship at the end nt to drive away - I'd thought that she might!

sheelock September 20 2007, 16:53:46 UTC

I was trying to show Lindsay's controlled personality and how easily Ryan was always able to disrupt it. Glad you enjoyed this.

beachtree September 20 2007, 16:26:50 UTC

I almost missed this- and I'm getting to your Ryan/Kirsten fic too, but had to start somewhere since I'm so far behind ( ... )

sheelock September 20 2007, 20:05:27 UTC

Thanks so much for your wonderful comments - you are right about what I was trying to convey about Lindsay and her relationship with Newport, et al. Thanks again for your review - it made my day!!

beachtree September 21 2007, 03:44:52 UTC

Thanks for your characterization- and for the whole story. It was a real pleasure to read. One of the best things about these challenges is all of the possibilities it reignites. Then there's the reawakening of muses, or just recalling how many gaps there are just clamoring to be filled- sometimes just in terms of character studies or isolated moments expanded to include so much more. It's amazing where one idea or a turn of a phrase can lead.

I hope that maybe you'll consider going down this road again. You've got a real grasp of what Lindsay is like and I'd be very curious to follow this relationship, or to get your take on more of the Cohens+1 dynamic in various forms.

Now, I do hope to get to your other story tomorrow. Really!

sheelock September 24 2007, 18:07:18 UTC

These sentence challenges really do get my muses going. And I do have ideas how this story can progress - hope to get the time to explore it.

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helen_c September 21 2007, 19:16:59 UTC

“Me, either,” Ryan said softly. It was then Lindsay noticed the flowers in his hand. Marissa had died nine years ago and he was still visiting her grave.
Snif... I can see this, in the future, though.

sheelock September 24 2007, 18:08:57 UTC

I wanted to show how Ryan will never forget Marissa, he's such a softy really.

60schic September 29 2007, 16:57:56 UTC

Lovely! I think that you acheived the goals you stated in above comments. Much as I am anti-Marissa, I know that Ryan would never forget about her. And even a grown-up Lindsay still cannot resist his quiet charms---who could?

Can you say *sequel*?

sheelock September 30 2007, 15:01:03 UTC

Thanks, glad you enjoyed! I do have some ideas how this story can progress just have to get it down on paper (computer).

oc_gambit2 October 24 2007, 00:46:19 UTC

Whew! I am EVER so late. I can’t blame you if you don’t buy it, but it’s because I like this so much and wanted to do it some justice ( ... )