Saiyuki Fic: Nocturnal Admissions, Hakkai/Gojyo, NSFW

[sharpeslass]

Title: Nocturnal Admissions
Author: sharpeslass
Rating: NC-17 (to be safe)
Pairings: Gojyo/Hakkai
Warnings: M/M, PWP
Disclaimer: not mine, making no money, etc.
Summary: Hakkai gets some unasked-for guidance from Gojyo on the subject of self-gratification. (Thanks, as usual, to jedishampoo for the beta and continued support!)

Comments

[ladylotusmoon]

When I first saw the title, I thought it said "Nocturnal Emissions". Which, it kinda was. lol. This is another story idea I haven't read before in Saiyuki. It was funny and hot at the same time. I really like your Gojyo and how that little filter between the mouth and the brain kinda doesn't work on him.

"Let down Hakkai and his poor penis..." I laughed so hard on this one, I had to stop for a minute.

"And then Gojyo felt like magic because, as something in him crested and broke, and spasms of hot white pleasure pulsed through his body and spots of light blurred his vision, he saw Hakkai fall into his own orgasm with a gasping shudder and, as he was coming for the first time in god knows how long, he called out Gojyo’s name." I love this whole paragraph. It's visceral and poetic and sweet at the same time.

"*Probably an equally lacking-in-substance sequel to follow... apologies in advance." The only line I didn't like. DON"T apologize for your work! Dork! :)

[sharpeslass]

lol. I'd apologize for apologizing, but it would probably defeat the purpose.

I had a lot of fun writing this one, though jedishampoo is somewhat dismayed that I've officially settled on 585 as my Saiyuki OTP.

Thank you so much for reading it!!

[despina_moon]

Well done! Fun and hot - Gojyo was perfect! I love how he managed to untangle Hakkai's head and help.

A team victory.

*snort* I loved that line.

Thank you for sharing!

P.S. - I love your icon!

[sharpeslass]

Thank you for reading. I had fun with this one.

[winged_sandals]

Haha, oh god... I absolutely loved this. Gojyo was just hilarious in this story. I loved how determined he was, and I thought you wrote his thought processes really well. I also really liked how awkward everthing was, but how in-character the two of them still were. You did a good job of portraying their friendship and their guy-ness (for lack of a better word), I thought. I also thought Hakkai's being finicky when it came to his fantasies was very cute. And a few of Gojyo's suggestions, along with the way that me made them, made me honestly laugh out loud. Oh, and the hot scene was definitely very, very hot. I liked the last couple of lines, too. Great job all-around, I thought!

[sharpeslass]

I'm glad it worked. I was nervous about posting. Thanks so much for your comments. I love it when people tell me why they liked (or sometimes didn't like) something I've written. It's awsome!!

[theskywasblue]

wow...that was hot and very sweet at the same time. The ending had me giggling with fangirlish joy as I fanned myself.
Way to go Gojyo!

[sharpeslass]

Yay! Thank you so much!!

[eyesofshinigami]

That was strangely...cute. And very endearing. It just seemed so right that Gojyo would want to help Hakkai out in such a situation.

And the whole thing about how Gojyo's little story dissolved into Hakkai fucking him...that was fantastic. :D

Very nice little story. I enjoyed it muchly. ♥

[sharpeslass]

It's funny what kinds of things can be "cute" in this fandom, isn't it? I'm really glad you liked, and thank you so much for commenting!