Leave a comment

Comments 8

miameirohara July 15 2009, 21:45:01 UTC
This Bella was great; already, she has more personality and likability than the original. She was hilarious.

Please (re)write some more!

Reply


tomeka04 July 15 2009, 21:59:01 UTC
Do you plan on continuing this? Because this is awesome!!

It was like pulling teeth to read the original, but this!! This was so smooth, and interesting! I could easily loose a few hours reading something written in this/your style!

Reply


writerbunny July 16 2009, 01:37:56 UTC
May God strike me down for saying it, but...

I like Bella. *braces*

No really, you've made her clever and snarky and a little self-conscious, just like *gasp!* a REAL TEENAGER. That, and your writing style is great, flows v. well, a bajillion times better than SMeyer.

More, please! I will be filled with boundless glee if Edward turns out to be a REAL vampire (or even better, a Sidhe Lord in the Unseelie Court of the Fae)!

Reply

shannon_zhang July 16 2009, 02:13:55 UTC
That would be awesome (both Edwards) XP I'm not too sure where I'm going with him; I'm thinking about keeping him the creepy stalker except Bella is like WTF. But no sparkles.

Reply


eltiteretista July 16 2009, 02:31:48 UTC
Bella has a personality? Bella has a reason not to be friendly? THIS IS TOO MUCH!!!

haha I kid, keep it up, it's already fifty times better than the actual thing :D

Reply


dragon_tea_leaf July 16 2009, 04:48:50 UTC
Keep. This. Up. Or. I. Kill. You.

I wish to read something with actual substance, a translation of the original version, I suppose? ...To something that people can actually read. :D

Reply


Leave a comment

Up