Fic: Second Move Advantage 2/2

[shangrilove]

Title: Second Move Advantage 2/2
Fandom: Football RPF
Pairing: Sergio Ramos/Fernando Torres
Rating: R
Word count: 10218
Disclaimer: Hopefully in another lifetime.
Notes: Highly inspired by an old Yamapi/Jin fic written by someone I knew in the JE fandom. She’s no longer active, but I hope that she knows how much I loved her writing. Someone

Comments

[epsilonbrain]

OMG, I totally cried reading this. I love how Sese doesn't want Fer to name his kids Nora and Leo but the kids get named that anyway. And I love Iker here, always the voice of reason. Take your time on the rest of your fics. It's towards the end of the season anyway and there are so many games that need to be watched~!

Btw, I was curious about the Pin fic that inspired this... Link me?

[shangrilove]

OMG, your name is so familiar... I think I remember you from when I used to write JE.. right? Or am I just crazy? The girl who wrote the Pin fic ended up deleting her journal for personal reasons, sadly. I was really devastated cause she wrote some really touching stuff. Do you remember the epic taxi driver!Jin fic floating around fandom a couple years ago? She was the one who wrote that. I really do wonder though how similar my fic is to hers, since it's based off what I remember reading.

[epsilonbrain]

Yup, we've probably bounced around somewhere in the JE world (haven't checked JE since NEWS' last break up, how many times has that happened anyway, like I didn't see that coming pfffft) Awww, it's too sad the writer of that Pin fic deleted her journal. I'm not sure I read Jin as a taxi driver in a fic though, or maybe I've read too many fics for me to keep track on all of them (haha *sheepish grin*). I was more of a media fan though... subbing and stuff. Still, I wish I could have read that Pin fic that inspired this. Considering your Sernando spin gave me so many feels, that might have also invoked the same feelings for me?

[shangrilove]

I think how people like Pin mostly depends on if they like Jin or not. Since Yamapi is pretty much universally loved while Jin is more of a love him or hate him kind of fellow. But yeah, I guess I grew dis-illusioned by how plastic every JE group was becoming, especially the new debut groups, even before NEWS broke up. I mostly followed KAT-TUN, though I did like Shige a lot.

[dld_ftw]

Aw, I loved it! Max and I thank you. :-) I love that Sese got a do over. Wouldn't it be great if we could all get those?

[shangrilove]

Well if Iker wasn't you know, a Saint, he would've wasted this do-over too. So lesson is, always listen to the captain.

[sparksfly7]

this is so, so good. ugh, i've wanted to read a great long fic for so long - you're right, the football fandom has been slipping. there just aren't as many readers or writers these days. it's like everyone's gone into hibernation.

i love some of the lines that you have in here. Fernando finally turns around, a man who’s come to terms with the acceptance that sometimes love doesn’t conquer all, sometimes it just is. He’s never expected anything from Sergio, but that doesn’t lessen the pain of it all.

Their bodies are locked in tight through this kiss, which may be their first but tastes like a thousand missed opportunities, it takes like the chance to make everything all right.

He’s on top of the striker before the door even shuts, kissing him like he’s sunlight and the whole time Sergio’s been locked underground.there's more but I can't remember right now. my brain's shutting down from tiredness anyway. (damn school.) i love time travel fics, although they're usually overdone (not in this fandom though), and there's this...spin

[shangrilove]

Hibernation is okay right? That means they'll come back when spring hits? I'm glad you liked it!

I tried to make Fernando's feelings kind of subtle towards the reader, but more obvious towards Sergio. But yeah, Original timeline Fernando was in love with Sergio too, but I couldn't think of a good way of getting rid of Olalla so hence the timeskip!

Funny thing about multiparters... I'm writing a Sernando that just hit 40k T____T. But I find with longer stuff, it's so hard to keep track of what's going on so I haven't posted much of it since it's such a great big mess.

Nando goes along with so many great pairings so it's hard to pick. I really like Danando AUs, though canon-wise I prefer Sernando and Juanando. Those both those pairings have been flagging a bit. :(

[lumaste]

This was perfect. I just can't help but marvel/envy your imagination and your way with words. I spent half of the time shouting at Nando to make a move and the other half yelling at Sergio to open his eyes. I'm so happy they FINALLY ended up together.
I'm falling more and more in love with your writing. Will be waiting for your other fics. Even if no one else writes a football fic, your works are enough to keep me in the fandom.

[shangrilove]

Well you've got to give Nando some credit, it was a lot harder for him to make a move, and Sergio definitely should've picked up on it since it was his second time. But yes, they were both rather clueless here, though Sergio more than Nando. Thanks for the lovely comments!

[klauduhisninjuh]

I loved your story. Sergio and Nando's relationship was adorable and the scene where you wrote about their first time was subtle and not agressive. I liked it. Iker as a wise man always has a place in my heart, so you've got a plus from me because you put him there ;) And I think that football fandom dies a little bit every day, people don't write, read and especially comment on fics, so everything just stops in the same place. I try to do my best with keeping our "family" alive but school is killing me for the last few moths. So yeah, I agree with your opinion. I think the wost thing is that authors don't get comments and have no idea about opinion of the readers and what they can do better next time. It's killing me and I think the other writer have the same problem...

[shangrilove]

Awww thanks for commenting. Well I don't write a lot of smut, still working my way up to something more graphic. I love Iker, I feel like he's under appreciated a lot, especially since he doesn't bromance much with people. Also I also think Iker and Nando are the reason why Sergio's calmed down so much lately, he used to be such a hot head.

Just doing my best to keep Sernando alive! It's been such a dying bromance... especially now with Nando's situation. I hope we see them together soon!

[klauduhisninjuh]

I hope so too :)