[fanfic] Got'cha (Witch)

[shamise]

Wow, I'm on a roll today. Two drabbles in 24 hours! It's a new record! This one, unlike 'Pregnant' follows closer to the planned plotline. ^^ I hope you like it. It feels a little stale to me. Thoughts? Opinions?

Comments

[eachainn]

My inner romantic is squeeing over the fact that Yami came when Yugi needed him. And I'm guessing that the demon barrier had something to do with the green in Yami's eyes.

Other than that, this is brilliant. The emotions and the pace work well together.

[shamise]

The green light plays into how Yami and get in and out of the city unlike other demons. :) It's also related to the 'mood rings.' And yes, my inner romantic demanded a dramatic rescue.

Thanks! I had thought the pace seemed a little jumpy and/or stale, so I'm glad to hear that it worked out,

:DDD

[natoya]

I loved this snippet! I loved too that Yami came when Yugi needed him, though I feel bad for the way everyone treated Yugi. Awesome snippet!

Re: :DDD

[shamise]

Thanks so much! Yea, people will be people, I suppose. The hard part now is writing in hints in earlier drabbles so that it doesn't seem like it came out of nowhere.

[chibigaltaylor]

Poor Yugi. But wow, their first thought is witch?