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Apr 25, 2009 02:54

just keep in mind, son.
the night is always darkest,
just before dawn..

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pandorastoybox April 27 2009, 05:28:39 UTC
you need one more syllable in the final line, in order to have a proper haiku. actually, in japanese, the syllable count is flexible, but in english haiku, i have noticed the counts more strictly enforced. however, a four-syllable final line with an ellipsis does sort of put emphasis on the final word, which I believe is the turning point of the poem...

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shallowshyguy16 April 27 2009, 17:56:27 UTC
well, see.
what you saw as "haiku form" i just did because i like a longer post, instead of just one line.
i'm no poet, and i wasn't trying to be, i just like this quote.

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