Comments | shadows_of_pyre: s[lj idol, second chance week 1] the dancing rope

shadows_of_pyre

s[lj idol, second chance week 1] the dancing rope

Jan 11, 2011 20:58

I lay against the Shadowsong, curled around him shaking with sobs. It was all I could do to remember to breathe-remember that if I wanted to live, I *needed* to breathe. I thought I felt him stroking my hair and every once in a while I thought I could feel his fingers along my jaw line. Thought, because it was such a dim thing that I wasn't even ( Read more... )

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estelle January 12 2011, 08:31:49 UTC

I don't really get it I'm afraid.

worldofcraimar January 12 2011, 10:59:37 UTC

"I reached for it ant took it from the air"...

SHe be a mage, so when the dancer was don dancing the heart, the girl layin' against the man took it out o'the air to be keepin'. In doin' so she also took the sense of safety she'd been lookin' for before she was to be realizin' where she was to be bein'. ... an' even after, if I be readin' int' thin's the way I can usually to be doin' like.

...

It be a little interestin' o'a take, but somehow it be workin' (for me, anyway)

She told me she didn't to be thinkin' this were one o'her better pieces, though.

~*C*~

dance_of_flame January 13 2011, 00:22:23 UTC

In essence: the narrator was having a flashback, and curled up against someone. The twin to the narrator, being a dancer and a mage, wove some sort of magic while dancing, which seems to have had the effect of safety and home-ness that the narrator was pleading for while flashbacking, thus pulling her out of the flashback.

(It would seem to grant, also, that the narrator was either as much a mage as the dancer, or at least susceptible to and able to see and touch what magic was woven, since she plucked the magicked heart out of the air when complete.)

That's what I interpret, anyway. ;) She'll correct me if I'm wrong.

dance_of_flame January 12 2011, 16:19:28 UTC

Daww, I feel loved. Heh.

Well done, sis. I can spot a few things I'd've changed-I'm sorry I never got to beta for you-but on the whole it's alright.

queen_pepita January 14 2011, 15:12:46 UTC

Twinsies are the best! I always wanted a twin because then there would be another person as pretty as me and I could do her hair and dress her up all day long!

Here are some cute twin babies just for you! They are hugging!

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sweeny_todd January 14 2011, 23:15:43 UTC

beautiful. those last two paragraphs are just beauitful

lawchicky January 15 2011, 02:13:02 UTC

This was very mysterious!