so i took notes while i was reading and they ... got a bit long. but whatever, this story is fucking awesome, it deserves six essays of feedback. so:
love the beginning, with sirius and james joking about death. this is EXACTLY what i wanted, this is completely perfect. when he thinks more death eaters have shown up, it's unfair! seriously, this fucking rocks. they're reckless and sort of unrepentant, which is fantastic. and dumbledore! disapproving!
james is making it official that he's afraid of lily! like that peter gets in a good line here, that's very nice. sirius is perfect here, the reckless overinvestment in the fellowship of the marauders that will grow into the sort of obsessive madness he has when we meet him in the books is growing along nicely here.
lots of really nice little lines in this story, like: Lily had once tried to explain electricity to him, but most of the time he couldn't be bothered. is just a little touch, but it's working overtime, you know? this is just great
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I am thrilled that you liked it, and thank you very much for the detailed feedback :). It was an extremely fun and wacky request, and one I really enjoyed working on.
You almost didn't get the magical disguises, though, until I realized halfway through I could work them in after all *g*--and I kind of wish I'd developed the Regulus bits a little more, but this came out a lot longer than I'd planned and I was pushing the wire. The joys of holiday sesas *g*. But thank you for a very fun request, and I'm pleased you liked how it came out.
Thank you so much! And I'm very glad the Sirius voice worked; it took me a little while to get a feel for him, but once I did he was extremely fun to write. And you're welcome to go out with him anytime *g*.
I meant to go to bed like forty minutes ago, but I started this and had to finish it. This was really great, and I especially loved the cameo by Regulus.
Really enjoyed the Order missions, Sirius charging in regardless, and the characterisations of the DE sympathisers were great--I especially liked them calling Voldemort 'perfectly ghastly'!
The R/S development was nicely done, especially Sirius' jealousy of Remus' ex. The bit about stopping to have fish and chips before having sex was funny and realistic. All good. :D
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love the beginning, with sirius and james joking about death. this is EXACTLY what i wanted, this is completely perfect. when he thinks more death eaters have shown up, it's unfair! seriously, this fucking rocks. they're reckless and sort of unrepentant, which is fantastic. and dumbledore! disapproving!
james is making it official that he's afraid of lily! like that peter gets in a good line here, that's very nice. sirius is perfect here, the reckless overinvestment in the fellowship of the marauders that will grow into the sort of obsessive madness he has when we meet him in the books is growing along nicely here.
lots of really nice little lines in this story, like: Lily had once tried to explain electricity to him, but
most of the time he couldn't be bothered. is just a little touch, but it's working overtime, you know? this is just great ( ... )
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You almost didn't get the magical disguises, though, until I realized halfway through I could work them in after all *g*--and I kind of wish I'd developed the Regulus bits a little more, but this came out a lot longer than I'd planned and I was pushing the wire. The joys of holiday sesas *g*. But thank you for a very fun request, and I'm pleased you liked how it came out.
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You have an especially wonderful Sirius-voice, did you know? I have a great big crush on him in this fic.
And now I think I've got to go back and read this a second time. Really spectacular.
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The R/S development was nicely done, especially Sirius' jealousy of Remus' ex. The bit about stopping to have fish and chips before having sex was funny and realistic. All good. :D
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