The Hush of Waiting by musesfool

[shackinup_sesa]

Title: The Hush of Waiting
Author: musesfool
Summary: This is his life now.
Rating: R
Recipient: luzdeestrellas

Comments

[laurificus]

Oh, oh. Thank you so much! I love so much about this I can't even start articulating it. I love how you capture their awkwardness, that sense of loss and betrayal, but that you counterpoint that so beautifully with their tentative hope and their always searching for what they could have had. And the ending! Remus taking him out because it's snowing, breaking the rules because it's Sirius and because he understands. God, it's lovely, and exactly what I was hoping for.

I also love how well you show Sirius's frustration and anger through the whole story. *sniffle* It's tangible and so very hurty. And the way Remus tries to be there for him, even though he's afraid and angry, too. Every part has something special in it, but part five I adore with unholy amounts of love.

There are so many lines I love, too, but these, in particular, made me squeeful.

Remus twists up and Sirius presses down; they slide slick and hard and hot against each other, and words tumble from Sirius's lips for Remus to swallow

[musesfool]

*twirls you*

I'm so happy you liked it and that it was close to what you wanted. *g* It was interesting to write, to go from the summer through the winter and how the relationship ebbed and flowed, and how they could forgive each other and yet still not ever quite stop being angry or bitter, and there's always something more to work out.

Thank you so much for the lovely feedback. It totally made my week.

[amberlynne]

"I'm not this cheap," he says finally, looking at the label on the bottle, so he doesn't have to see any hurt that may flash across Remus's face, though he wants to hurt him, wants to spark some reaction from him.

"I never thought you were." Remus takes the insult with grace, and Sirius realizes he's heard worse, and that makes him angry, at the world for the way it's treated Remus, but also at himself, for leaving Remus at the world's mercy.

Oh, that was so. Ouch. Just both of them broken by what's happened to them. *sniffle*

He wants to remember this moment, the start of something after everything else has ended,

Not to be repetitive *points to above comment* but I adore that little moment to pieces.

I adore your Sirius here. Sometimes, he can be written as so incredibly cruel and broken during this time period that it's hard to take him. But the way you've done it allows the good man in him to show through and there is hope there, that he could get past it if he'd had the chance. Very very nicely done. :)

[musesfool]

Thank you so much! I'm so happy it works for you, especially the characterization, and Sirius's bastardy - I think it's a core part of his character, but it's not all there is to him, and Remus, of all people, knows that.

[rian219]

Oh, this hurts. But there's hope at the end. That's the best part, Remus taking him out in the snow at the end, because he really does know what it's like. I agree with amberlynne about your Sirius too - so many people cross the line into making him a completely unlikeable bastard, but here you've shown him to be petty, childish and self-absorbed while still making him human, and so making his reactions and reasons for them human too, and completely understandable. Poor Sirius. My heart aches for them because of what we know comes next. I keep saying that in my reviews, but it's true. Sigh.

[musesfool]

Thank you so much! I'm so happy it works for you, especially the characterization, and the sense that Remus *does* understand, even when Sirius thinks he doesn't, and that Sirius's behavior is believable and understandable, even when he's being a brat.

[musesfool]

Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it, and found it in character and moving!

[kestrelsan]

This is my favorite canon period, and I love all the backstory you brought into it; this is so wonderfully fleshed out and real. I love Sirius here--how he deals with the overlay of memories; all the characters are fabulous. Really nice.

[musesfool]

Thank you! I'm so happy the backstory rang true for you, and that the characterization worked.