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FIC: Lay Down

Jun 30, 2006 21:56

Fic: Lay Down
Rating: PG-13
Summary: After, they Apparate home, saturated with rain and blood, and the oily slide of dark magic skidding along Remus’s skin like unfamiliar hands.
Thanks to: setissma, miraielle, and statelines

For the shacking_up Summer 2006 Minimalist Fic Exchange.
Recipient: sheafrotherdon, with this prompt.

( Sirius is two months and thirteen days older; spent the entire time reminding Remus of this the year they came of age... )

fiction: taffetablue, minimalist challenge

Comments 33

ninjajab July 1 2006, 16:53:53 UTC

Eh.

:D

taffetablue July 2 2006, 08:26:59 UTC

Ahahah, I got this comment in my inbox and about died because it's up there in the Best Things Ever. Oh, Devyn, where would I be without your heartfelt and utterly moving praise?

musesfool July 1 2006, 18:20:30 UTC

Oh. Oh. That's so hard and sad and painful. *sniffle* Beautifully done.

taffetablue July 2 2006, 08:27:52 UTC

Bwah! Thank you so much. The idea I had was all sweet and loving and then... I don't know, there was blood, and it was all shot to hell. Thanks for the feeback!

penknife July 1 2006, 20:02:43 UTC

Poor darlings. With their spoons. Lovely and painful.

taffetablue July 2 2006, 08:28:27 UTC

Thank you! I almost said knives but I was like, hmm, this is morbid enough.

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taffetablue July 2 2006, 08:29:22 UTC

Thank you so much ♥ I'm really glad you enjoyed it. And that last paragraph was totally an afterthought -- I was just going to end it, and statelines tsked at me and sent me back to give it an actual ending. :">

theemdash July 2 2006, 11:51:27 UTC

Just beatiful. The tone sets everything here and it's just lovely. Melchonly, but not, a promise of better times, but a constant reminder of reality. Your phrasing is just wonderful and your sentences are so lovely. Also, this may sound insane, but I love your comma usage. &hearts

taffetablue July 3 2006, 04:31:55 UTC

Thank you so much! I am absolutely floored by the comma thing; I have an endless tug-o-war with my betas over my effusive comma usage, but I totally put them where I would take a breath when I'm speaking. O, weird comma pacing, so dear to my heart! I'm so glad you enjoyed it ;)

theemdash July 3 2006, 10:53:49 UTC

Stlyistically it works very nicely. *hearts