Games Without Frontiers 2/2

[x_erikah_x]

Title: Games Without Frontiers 2/2
Category: SGA H/C Challenges Easter-fic 2010
Author: Roo1965
Story for: Kriadydragon
Season : 3 , after Common Ground but before Phantoms & The Return.
Summary : Sheppard’s lost and then found, but not happy to be back in Atlantis- why is that? Just because he’s paranoid, it doesn’t mean they’re not out to get

Comments

[x_erikah_x]

Loved it. You managed to put everything in and made it really interesting. LoveShep/ATA gene/Atlantis interactions.

[roo1965]

Thanks, glad it hit the mark for you. i had fun writing it. Yesm I love ShepLAntis too...does it show?!!

[tridget]

Ha! I never suspected a "stomach bug" literally as the problem. Nice twist. ShepAtlantis and the ATA gene is a real bonus. The others on Atlantis solving the problem was a nice bit of comfort and the line "There’s a rush of power and all he sees are 1’s and 0’s, followed by a giddy feeling and a soft caress Safe now kisses across his nerve endings," was ever so sweet.

[roo1965]

Do you know i was so intent on the whole tracker thing, that the double entendre of 'stomach bug' never occurred to me- but you are so right! Thanks for the kind words.

[kriadydragon]

Awesome! :D I love twisty whump, where the cause of the problem is completely unexpected. And love even more a paranoid and spooked Sheppard. Thank you so much for this :D

[roo1965]

Heh, i thought you'd enjoy a whacked out John running all over place- and so did i. I totally fell in love with the first part of the story which made finishing it difficult, as i couldn't seem to get the words out right.

[michelel72]

Poor John! His disorientation was very affective, and the "stomach bug" is devious.

[roo1965]

I don't think i've ever been called devious before- but i think i like it! Glad to oblige.

[kristen999]

You did a great job with the prompt with a cool creative twist. There was a lot of tension, not knowing what had happened to John. Carson's observation during the meet were perfect, John 'not knowing' a giant burden for someone values so much control. Nice medical details with the procedure and how the tracker worked.

[roo1965]

I'm glad that the not knowing and what the heck and oh my god bits came over to create enough tension and drive for the story. I try to read up on medical stuff and understand what's going on with the characters.