THE CLOCK TICKS DOWN BY kristen999 [LFWS #1 ROUND 4]

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Title: The Clock Ticks Down
Author: kristen999
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Stargate belongs to Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer Studios Inc., no infringements of any rights is intended.
Spoilers: None
Prompt for the Round: Write a whump fic with John and ONE of his team. John POV.

Comments

[iamza]

I'd like to see this on the show, just because so often it's Ronon doing the heavy lifting. I like that here, John is the one carrying Ronon to safety.

[kristen999]

Thank you. I thought it would be interesting to have John have to struggle with Ronon's weight in a race against time.

[drufan]

Loved the countdown. And the sense of urgency was related nicely with the descriptions of John's physical state. Thanks!

[kristen999]

Thank you. I wanted to try a new spin on the countdown theme.

[wildcat88]

Oh, I liked! Nice job of comparing how much time is left to mundane things. I also liked how the story is interspersed in the countdown.

[kristen999]

Thank you...I wanted people to relate how little time they had by comparing it to 'normal' things in life. Glad it worked.

The Clock Ticks Down

[anonymous]

Wonderful!

Re: The Clock Ticks Down

[kristen999]

Thank you.

[2bluaeryn]

It was good to read of John carrying Ronon for a change. Also liked how he measured the countdown.

[kristen999]

Thank you...I liked imagining the difficulty of John carrying Ronon..it can be done, just not easily. :D