CRASH BY obsessed101 [LFWS #1 ROUND 4]

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Title: Crash
Author: obsessed101
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Stargate belongs to Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer Studios Inc., no infringements of any rights is intended.
Spoilers: None
Prompt for the Round: Write a whump fic with John and ONE of his team. John POV.

Comments

[rustydog]

I really like the situation and how the story lays out, with the backstory shown, not told. I ejoyed this! However, in the first several lines I found it very confusing to figure out whose POV it was (I knew it was supposed to be John's but I wondered if you had read the challenge wrong) and who was speaking.

[obsessed1o1]

Thanks. It was important to get the backstory in there.....sorry the beginning was confusing. Glad you enjoyed it anyway