Comments | sgahcchallenges: TEMPORARY LOAN BY <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/jadesfire2808">jadesfire2808</a></strong> [LFWS #1 ROUND 1]

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TEMPORARY LOAN BY jadesfire2808 [LFWS #1 ROUND 1]

Oct 24, 2008 10:12

Title: Temporary Loan
Author: jadesfire2808
Rating: G
Disclaimer: Stargate belongs to Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer Studios Inc., no infringements of any rights is intended.
Spoilers: Maybe Sateda
Prompt for the Round: > Write a story featuring the team in which ONLY dialogue is used. No scene setters at all. Just pure dialogue. Not even ‘... Sheppard said’ or ‘... ( Read more... )

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Comments 7

wildcat88 October 24 2008, 13:26:32 UTC

Very nice! The voices were good and easy to distinguish plus a little Ronon backstory!

sterenyk_strey October 24 2008, 15:38:17 UTC

Love the 'whispering' and 'fading out'. Clever idea.

tielan October 24 2008, 22:30:50 UTC

Good voices, lovely Ronon&Teyla hurt/comfort scene, adore the flash of humour between Ronon and John, John's concern for Teyla, and Rodney and John sniping at each other while fixing the 'jumper, plus Ronon backstory for the win!

Well done!

2bluaeryn October 25 2008, 21:06:14 UTC

This was a nice little insight into Ronon's life before Atlantis. You said so much with so few words. Well done.

Really liked that ending *G*

kristen999 October 26 2008, 20:44:40 UTC

Very, very sweet. Love Ronon talking to Teyla about the meaning behind his coat.