A NEW BEGINNING BY ga_unicorn [LFWS #3 ROUND 1]

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Title: A New Beginning
Author: ga_unicorn
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Stargate belongs to Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer Studios Inc., no infringements of any rights is intended.
Spoilers: 'Runner'
Prompt for the Round: Write an episode tag or missing scene using script format. The team is a must, but you can include other characters, OC or not. H/C is not a must.

Comments

[beckys91]

One thing I don't like about the script format tied with the word count is that I couldn't tell until the very end what episode this is from. I'd love to see this as a short story instead. Sheppard has to be a bit chattier in this format than my concept of him, but I think that would be easy to fix if you could put in some narrative. Thanks for the good read, though!

[chrissie0707]

I liked this, but I almost feel like the dialogue and the premise would be more powerful if it came from Weir instead of Sheppard. It's a great gesture on his part, but I think it would be more, coming from Weir.

[tridget]

I liked this. Bittersweet - the promise of a new life mixed with references to what Ronon has been through. My favorite line was "I think we’ll be okay. But you can stun him if he comes out without me."