Action/Adventure, Week 1: Refugees in Rivertown

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Title: Refugees in Rivertown
Author: friendshipper
Genre: Action/Adventure
Prompt "It is a far, far better thing that I do than I have ever done." (Dickens)
Word Count: 5400 wds
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: non-graphic mention of various horrors (childhood prostitution, slavery, poverty)
Summary: Young Lona and her sisters are orphans and charnel pickers, making

Comments

[wildcat88]

This was lovely! Your world-building was fantastic, and Lona and the other OCs were very well done. I really enjoyed this.

[valiree]

A great teyla centric story but what I do love in there, is the chararacterization of Lona. Not to much is "written" but so lot is "seen" : une belle histoire, pleine d'émotions.

[rhymer23]

Excellent! I love outsider viewpoint, and this was a really good one, with the characters and their world fleshed out really well by showing and by subtle means, and not by bombarding us with exposition.

Stories like this illustrate one of the reasons why I love this ficathon so. Because of the communities I frequent, I wouldn't normally come across Teyla-centric stories like this - and, I have to admit, normally wouldn't put them at the top of my reading list if I did. The ficathon allows me to experience gems in genres I wouldn't normally encounter. Thank you!

[gaffsie]

This was great! You made the alien city so vibrant and real through Lona's eyes.

[michelel72]

This is a wonderful evocation of an all-too-plausible society. The characters work very well, and it's really nice to see Teyla in a leading role.