Team, Week 3: Ashes

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Title: Ashes
Author: water_soter
Prompt/Genre: Endings and Beginnings/Team (bonus fic)
Summary: With all the dangers and enemies they faced on a daily basis, it was easy to forget that not perils have a shape or a form.
Main Characters: Rodney, Sheppard, Ronon, Teyla and Keller.
Word Count: 3,209
Series: One-Shot
Author's Notes: This story is written as an

Comments

Reaction and Revierw

[agdrgn]

Yes, you do have some English problems but a beta would solve those (or help to), but the story itself is marvelous in its utter despair.

--Silverthreads

Re: Reaction and Revierw

[water_soter]

Thank you for your comments. This story was writing a bit on the fly, and while my beta did her best, the rest of the errors are all mine.

[wildcat88]

You do a wonderful job of expressing yourself especially as a non-native English speaker. I agree with agdrgn, a beta whose native language is English would help. Your decription of this world and the anguish of the loss is excellent.

[water_soter]

Thank you for the kind words, this story needs work but thank you for reading it anyway. *huggles*

[leesa_perrie]

That was very moving, especially towards the end with Rodney's guilt. I could really feel the pain there.

As others have said, a beta would help, but I am in awe of your ability to write in a language not your own and felt you did a really good job.

[water_soter]

Oh wow! I can't believe someone of your caliber would read my humble attempts at fanfiction. Thank you for commenting!

Team, Week 3: Ashes - story

[maxinemayer]

Very sad and moving story. Thank you for sharing.
Love, max

Re: Team, Week 3: Ashes - story

[water_soter]

And thank you for reading! Hopefully my next attempts at fanfiction will be to your liking!

[nottasha]

Poor Rodney feels the guilt of everything, doesn't he? Very nicely done... and so darn sad

[water_soter]

WOW! Thank you Nottasha, I am a huge fan and have read most of your stories. I am humbled that you took the time to read my little story.