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Second Story by elementalv (Skeevy Ancients Challenge)

Mar 14, 2009 10:03

Title: Second Story
Author: elementalv
Rating: PG
Warnings: Mentions of abuse and alcoholism.
Notes: Late season 4-ish; no spoilers. Roughly 1,500 words.
Summary: Everything changed.

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( Second Story )

author: elementalv, challenge: skeevy ancients

Comments 61

lavvyan March 14 2009, 14:25:09 UTC

Whoa. Now that's nifty.

elementalv March 14 2009, 18:57:13 UTC

Thanks. I thought it was going to be fluff, because come on -- John in a beautiful baby contest has to be good for at least one or two laughs -- but it shot off in a more interesting direction.

danceswithgary March 14 2009, 14:35:05 UTC

Yay, an ancient device that did something good! :-D

elementalv March 14 2009, 19:00:58 UTC

Good and bad, really. In my head, both Weir and Sumner were alive and present on Atlantis when John traveled back into his life. On the other hand, John was also a Major in the first timeline and was going to retire as such in a few months, leaving Atlantis without a second thought.

cathexys March 14 2009, 14:38:29 UTC

Oh, lovely. That last line was perfect to show the fundamental changes not just in history but in John!

elementalv March 14 2009, 19:03:19 UTC

I really love looking at small moments that can have a huge impact down the road. Reminding his mother that he loved her defused her tension. Without the tension, she didn't attack him, and when she didn't attack him, she didn't sink further into guilt. Because she was a better mother, John was able to become a better man and so on.

cathexys March 14 2009, 19:22:58 UTC

Yes. Exactly! I'm fascinated by the aspects in someone's identity that come from outside and what is inherent in the character. Multiverses often show that when we see our John vs Vegas!John, etc., and time travel can do that too. Your story did that in a minimalist way (both in absolute length and in the moment that changed things) that was really, really nice :)

elementalv March 14 2009, 19:29:26 UTC

Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed it (and why). I'm very happy with the way this story turned out for the reasons you mentioned -- looking at how a person turned out the way they did.

leesa_perrie March 14 2009, 14:53:37 UTC

I didn't expect that twist at the end, excellently done!

elementalv March 14 2009, 19:04:30 UTC

Thanks. To be honest, I was surprised by the story as well.

wordwitch March 14 2009, 16:46:48 UTC

Oh that is a very good hurty. Oh my word.

elementalv March 14 2009, 19:05:27 UTC

Thanks. We really don't see a lot of fic with John's mother, and I'm always curious about her.