Comments | sga_flashfic: After the First Death, by rhymer 23 (first aid challenge)

rhymer23 in sga_flashfic

After the First Death, by rhymer 23 (first aid challenge)

Jul 03, 2008 19:43

Title: After the First Death
Author: Eildon Rhymer (rhymer23)
Words: 4300
Rating: PG
Characters: Sheppard, plus team
Summary: With the correct training, you can attempt to keep a badly injured soldier alive in the field until medical care arrives. If you succeed, your part in their story is over. But if you fail, what then?
Note: No canon characters were ( Read more... )

author: rhymer23, challenge: first aid

Comments 28

aelfgyfu_mead July 4 2008, 00:58:09 UTC

I'm glad he finally realized that his team understands. Sheppard tries so much to go it alone, and he doesn't have to! They don't want him to!

rhymer23 July 4 2008, 07:21:17 UTC

... and Sheppard being Sheppard, he won't lean on them openly and vocally, but I think he does depend on them quite a lot, perhaps in more ways than he knows.

(The comment has been removed)

rhymer23 July 4 2008, 07:23:22 UTC

Thanks! I always seem to end up having to hurt Sheppard physically in order to get him to do proper angst. He seems to admit things about his feelings that little bit more when he's hurting. So this time I just stuck him in a bed, wouldn't let him leave, and forced him to see these issues through to their conclusion. He'd have run away from me otherwise.

leesa_perrie July 4 2008, 13:37:24 UTC

Brilliant response to the challenge. Very intense and moving, with a brief hint of humour here and there.

My baby scientists are still talking about it. Most of them think you're a hero, and I can't be having that; they're mine. (LOL!)

Loved the way the team understand what John is going through. The end scene was perfect.

rhymer23 July 4 2008, 14:25:24 UTC

Thank you! I do always like to put a bit of humour even into the saddest of stories, and normally Rodney is happy to oblige with some fun dialogue. :-)

explodedpen July 4 2008, 14:00:51 UTC

This was awesome and the end bit was made of the finest teamy goodness :D Great job!

rhymer23 July 4 2008, 14:26:50 UTC

Thank you! I do so love exploring this team. They're just there for each other, in those subtle, often-silent ways that matter.

ladyoflisquill July 4 2008, 15:18:39 UTC

This is wonderful. It's so seldom we get to see how the weight of command on John's shoulders makes him feel.

rhymer23 July 4 2008, 15:30:23 UTC

Thank you! It's not an aspect of Sheppard's character that I've explored quite so directly before, so I found it an interesting story to write.