First Night Challenge by Speranza

Mar 06, 2005 01:59

Title: Just Like Christmas
Author: Speranza
Pairing: Sheppard/McKay

Just Like Christmas (1700 words) )

challenge: first night, author: speranza

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history_gurl March 6 2005, 15:19:05 UTC
Ooooh, such a Rodney.

Goddamned literalist. Sometimes he really didn't know what to do with people who weren't abstract thinkers.

That somehow says it all, doesn't it?

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cesperanza March 7 2005, 06:26:47 UTC
Thanks a lot for this comment--since this my first try at these characters I'm frankly glad to be somewhere in the realm of characterization. I really appreciate the encouragement!

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maryavatar March 6 2005, 15:44:55 UTC
Really good characterisations there, I could hear them both perfectly. And sex on the first night! So hard to do well while in character, but there it is... you did it.

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cesperanza March 7 2005, 06:32:37 UTC
Thanks so much--this is my first shot in SGA, and I have that new fandom terror.

Vis a vis sex on the first night--I always like to play with the idea that, wow, what if it were no big deal? (That's not my only idea, god knows, but it's a card I like to keep in the deck, trot out every once in a while. Especially since my natural inclination is to create wildly bizarre and elaborate situations. It's good to remember that-- A: "Hey, let's fuck." B: (glances at watch) "Yeah, okay."--pretty much does it most of the time.

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maryavatar April 4 2005, 08:30:45 UTC
Yeah, that's my favorite approach! Would just love to see the story continued, whether they wake up together or alone, just not sappy, freaked or overly embarrassed.

Jo

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spikedluv March 6 2005, 16:10:05 UTC
Love your characterization of Rodney not being able to stop playing with his new toys, and being freaked by the talking coffee machine, lol. John not being able to sleep because they were in a new galaxy was a nice insight, and the hand of power made me laugh. Oh, as did Rodney 'rolling' over the dividing wall, even though he could picture himself jumping over it! Nice imagery. And John being perfectly okay with Rodney not being able to get back over the wall...after. *g* Very nicely done!!

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cesperanza March 7 2005, 06:33:27 UTC
Thank you, thank you. Much appreciated! I'm a first time SG-A writer, so I'm delighted and greatly encouraged!

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cesperanza March 7 2005, 06:35:06 UTC
Thanks so much! I'm very grateful for the encouragement (I have a touch of that "new fandom" terror. *g*) And you're right about exhaustion and drunkenness--it makes me want to propose a drunkeness challenge! All that drunk, sleepy Sheppard...yum.

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thegrrrl2002 March 6 2005, 16:56:27 UTC
Lovely stuff. The hop over the balcony wall that wasn't quite a hop, I just loved that. And John so not-thrilled about being there, both of them so tired, their defenses down--I could just feel it. I really enjoyed this.

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cesperanza March 7 2005, 06:36:31 UTC
Thank you so much! It's my (nervous squeak) first time actually trying out the voices myself and so I'm very grateful people are liking it and being so encouraging. I think there's a bigger story in John's first night, too--he didn't really have very long to adapt to this situation, did he?

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thegrrrl2002 March 7 2005, 14:19:28 UTC
he didn't really have very long to adapt to this situation, did he?

Oh, absolutely. It's frustrating the way that has been glossed over. That, and the fact that he didn't even know about the SGC until the events in "The Rising". I would have loved to have seen at least a little bit of his reaction when it was all explained to me.

Maybe by Rodney?

Anyway, you are absolutely correct, there's a bigger story there, so go now and write it. *g*

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