What The River Says by soapbox_solo38 (F**king Freezing Challenge)

[soapbox_solo38]

 “We’ll put them in cryo,” the old mechanic grunted as he hefted the woman’s legs higher, trying not to look at the blood that was turning her red shirt something closer to black.

“But-” The younger engineer started to protest, lines deepening on a face that was too young for them. He stopped when the ancient ship groaned, wearying in its fight

Comments

[silver_galaxy]

Great story, I loved the way you were able to show Elizabeth's fear and pain about being near people after what happened to the little boy

[soapbox_solo38]

Thanks; I was worried that I had crossed over the border of "showing" and devolved into "telling" when I wrote her various reactions. It's good to hear that wasn't horribly obvious. ^^

[havocthecat]

Oh, this is just beautifully heartbreaking. I love it so very, very much.

[soapbox_solo38]

Thank you. :) I suppose I can't apologize for the hurt, because I hoped it would happen, but I'm really happy that you liked it. ^^

[havocthecat]

Oh, no, don't apologize for it at all. It's one of the things that really makes the story.

[wanderingsmith]

heartbreaking.
love the poetry, luv. 's a lovely change, and you use the.. style(?) well

[soapbox_solo38]

It's always exciting to try out a new way of writing. ^^ Thank you!