Face to Face, by rhymer23 (Supernatural challenge)

[rhymer23]

Title: Face to Face
Author: Eildon Rhymer (rhymer23)
Words: 2900
Rating: PG
Characters: Sheppard, McKay, Teyla, Ronon
Spoilers: Up to and including Doppelganger. However, the Doppelganger reference is so incredibly vague I'd hesitate to call it a spoiler. The blink-and-you'd-miss-them Lifeline and Reunion references are almost as vague, but are somewhat

Comments

[deaka]

Wow. That was beautifully done, creepy and touching in one. Loved each person's response to the threat, Sheppard pretending not to be affected, Ronon trying to fight through, Rodney trying to rationalise what was happening, Teyla being the one to reach out and understand.

Amazing work, well done.

[rhymer23]

Thanks! It was fun to write. I've never tried to write creepy before - though it didn't end up being as creepy as I'd originally intended, since all the character stuff took over. (Which is one of the great things about writing, of course. Even in the shortest of stories, the story takes on a life of its own.)

[nuetronorange]

Wonderfully written. Thank you.

[rhymer23]

And thanks for reading! :-)

[kristen999]

The various spirits and their reflection on each team member was eerie and haunting. I enjoyed how each of them fought their fear, this had a wonderfully chilling and sad tone.

The end with Teyla, the only one of them willing to reach out was perfect. Its tough to write good, spooky moody pieces, but you did a great job.

[rhymer23]

Thanks! I've never tried to write a spooky story, as far as I remember, so it was a fun challenge. Not that it ended up being quite as spooky as I'd intended, since the character exploration part of the story pushed itself to the fore.

[sholio]

Ooh, this was a creepy delight! I loved the team members' various reactions to the ghosts, and Teyla, of course, being the one to finally open up and see what (who) the ghosts really were -- and to steer her still-living teammates away from that future. There's something vaguely comforting that they'd still be taking care of each other after death, though...

And if I interpreted the Rodney POV scene correctly, Rodney's ghost is still babbling on, even though he can't really be heard. Sounds like him. *g*

[rhymer23]

Yup! Rodney's ghost is still babbling away, which is why McKay is the only one who has an element of sound in his ghostly experience. I'd love to know what he was saying... ;-)

[ceitie]

Creepy and sad at the same time, and of course Teyla's the only one to think of trying to communicate with the ghosts.

[rhymer23]

Thanks! I'd originally intended everyone to see the ghosts at the end, but it just felt far more right for Teyla to be the only one seeing them. Everyone else is too busy denying the reality of the situation, so will never see the truth.