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Breathing Lessons by dogeared (Sickness Challenge)

Feb 16, 2007 23:50

Title: Breathing Lessons
Author: dogeared
Rating: PG
Summary: John doesn't remember what it's like not to breathe, but his body does. ~550 words.

( And he can't believe it's hitting him so hard, like someone came up and whacked the back of his knees with a baseball bat )

author: dogeared, challenge: sickness

Comments 51

sheafrotherdon February 17 2007, 05:08:56 UTC

ohhhhhh it blooms sweet and then sharp - yes, yes, that's exactly how it feels. And god, you captured the grip of it, the horrible panic so, so well, and then Rodney, regular as breathing and just as essential, implied. adshlfksdfh beautiful ♥

dogeared February 17 2007, 22:09:06 UTC

Yes, Rodney, essential as air! eeeee thank you ♥ ♥

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dogeared February 17 2007, 22:09:51 UTC

Thank you so much! :)

ninja007 February 17 2007, 05:34:11 UTC

Very, very well written.

Sit back and enjoy a job well done.

dogeared February 17 2007, 22:10:20 UTC

Thank you! :)

blade_girl February 17 2007, 05:34:43 UTC

Jeez, this describes asthma so accurately I'm having to convince my bronchial tubes that it's just a story, really!

dogeared February 17 2007, 22:11:00 UTC

Hee, deep calm breaths! :)

tesserae_ February 17 2007, 05:55:18 UTC

Remarkable - your writing is so vivid *I* was having trouble catching my breath!

dogeared February 17 2007, 22:11:55 UTC

Thanks so much! :)