Comments | sga_flashfic: Revival by halotolerant (Missing Person's Challenge)

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Revival by halotolerant (Missing Person's Challenge)

Jan 06, 2007 02:46

Title: Revival
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Sheppard/Ronon

( Almost two years after they ran from Atlantis and locked the doors behind them, John Sheppard was finally losing contact with everyone that reminded him of it, and of what had happened. )

challenge: missing persons, author: halotolerant

Comments 5

ninja007 January 6 2007, 10:19:59 UTC

Love this!! Great idea!! I'd love to see more along this vein. Very good writing.

hth_the_first January 6 2007, 14:37:30 UTC

Interesting! I really like the intimations of what terrible thing they accidentally did to Teyla, as well as the main bulk of the story. Because if you bring Ronon to Earth, yeah, what is he going to do on his own, what's he qualified for? Pretty much crime or sex, I would think *g* And there's this real sadness to the fact that Ronon is so -- what? -- either ashamed or angry or just shut-down that he won't even acknowledge that he knows John, he's just going to go through his routine and then get away. So the story ends up being both hot and really wrenching. There definitely could be more to this if you wanted -- there's a lot going on here.

halotolerant January 7 2007, 02:02:03 UTC

There definitely could be more to this if you wanted -- there's a lot going on here.
This was originally longer and then I looked at the plot I'd figured out and went pale and just abridged to this sequence (which was the one that had first popped into my head). But I would like there to be more, because, as you say: if you bring Ronon to Earth, yeah, what is he going to do on his own, what's he qualified for? Pretty much crime or sex and there is pretty-woman!Ronon in my brain screaming to be let out.
Do you think I should take a crack at it?

apatheia_jane January 8 2007, 23:15:44 UTC

dossier February 28 2007, 23:22:44 UTC

Okay, I really like this; it's almost like images flashing at you in a strobe light, enough to get the story, but leaving you panting for more.

I'll agree it would be nice to hear more about Teyla, I love apocafics--but leave this as is. It's such a lovely, fragile thing that is perfect all on its own.