Iphigenia at Atlantis, by halotolerant (Mission Report Challenge)

[halotolerant]

Rating: PG-13

Comments

[apple_pi]

Wow, this is fabulous. Love it.

[halotolerant]

Cheers! Thanks for feeding back

[marag]

Oh. My. Unspecified Deity. Wow.

Okay, I have to explain that the whole time I was reading this, my daughter was grabbing my arm and my husband was hovering over me, and I was pushing them away with one hand while I scrolled down with the other. I *had* to know what was going to happen.

I love the way we gradually figure out something is weird and what's weird and what's going on. And the ending is perfect! (I would also like to thank you for putting in an explanation of why she repeats their dialogue exactly. Most people wouldn't have thought of that, and it would have bugged me!)

[halotolerant]

thank-you!

(I would also like to thank you for putting in an explanation of why she repeats their dialogue exactly. Most people wouldn't have thought of that, and it would have bugged me!)

I tried to make it a real document as far as possible. In other words a story can be told from first person POV but since this is the 'mission report' challenge I felt it had to be a specific item of documentation and so all the words had to be plausible (hence my certain grammar sacrifices).

[purple_cube]

Great story, loved how it all unravelled. Particularly liked Rodney's reaction/interaction to 'Jeannie'.

[halotolerant]

Thank-you!

[lilyayl]

This is fantastic. Like the others I really enjoy the slow reveal. The POV is perfect for the story. I would like to see more of Jeannie, perhaps after they tell her the truth of her origins?

[halotolerant]

Cheers for feeding back. I'm glad you liked her, I admit I'm attached to the character now so maybe someday she'll be back!

[rustler]

Creepy, inventive, and wonderful.

[halotolerant]

Thank-you