Gaussian Function by Saeva; Earthside Challenge

[saeva]

Gaussian Function by saeva
John Sheppard
~ 4,400 words
Summary: Long before the Stargate program, John *still* never sees it coming.
Notes: This was written awhile back but never posted. Just a little rift on John as a teenager for the Earthside Challenge.

Comments

[bantha_fodder]

I liked this a lot. It was so adorable.

[saeva]

Thanks! Wee!John is too cute in my head.

By the way, I have a La Femme Nikita fic. I wouldn't mention this but, well, you and I share, like, six fandoms including that one and that marks you, I, and zaneetas as the only people I know who like LFN. So, I thought you might be interested.

- Andrea.

[bantha_fodder]

I just found it! FABULOUS.

[dossier]

interesting! I liked it, especially the quite natural flow of the dialog--I mean that as in it wasn't, but perfectly stilted and off-balance. thanks!

[saeva]

I understand what you mean and thank you. Glad you liked it!

- Andrea.

[sholio]

This was excellent! Great look at young John, and I really didn't see the big twist coming. It's a nice change from the abused-John paradigm that so many writers use when they touch on his childhood, and you make it so real, not a "poor John" story that makes us want to feel sorry for him, but something that just *is* -- even though it's sad, it's just his life and he deals with it. And you've also got the teenage awkwardness down, and the way that John, even so young, hides his real emotions under a lazy grin. Nice job!

[saeva]

Ooh, thank you for such nice comments! I really appreciate it. And, yeah, my co-writer and I really like this backstory and feel it fits the character pretty well.

- Andrea.

[elaran]

OMG perfect. I can see that so well. :D

That was good.

[saeva]

Thanks! And thanks for commenting; glad you liked it.

- Andrea.

[tielan]

This was great - John all young, a little insecure, and embarrassed, without the emotional cover that years of life have provided him. Well-written and a pleasure to read.