Sometime Soon Would Be Nice, by MaisieRita

[maisierita]

Author: MaisieRita
Challenge: Dangling
Rating: R for language
Genre: Gen
Pairing: McShep, contained almost entirely in one mostly gratuitious six-word phrase that you can just skip past if it makes you happy
Words: 2,413
Summary:He’s hanging so far up that the ground's invisible, and all John can do is work out how fast he'll be falling when he hits it. 
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Comments

[amothea]

loved it. :) I liked the not knowing what had happened until later in the story. It built up the tension a bit and it was really interesting. :)

thanks for sharing.

[maisierita]

Thanks! Glad you liked it.

[minnow1212]

Oh, wow. What an idea. And I loved the realization that the constant distractions from talking were being caused by John, too.

[maisierita]

Funny thing is, I'm not sure I intended to put that in there in the beginning. :)

[mz_bstone]

huh.

Cool.

I like the barfing realism.

I'd've blown chunks, for sure.

And the "John".

god.

B

[maisierita]

Thanks. It's a good thing he didn't throw up in mid-air though. 'Coz ... yeccch.

[maisierita]

Oh, thanks! I worry about writing Rodney.

And yeah, he definitely has it figured out by the third time. :)

[lauralaitaine]

Oh I liked this :) Moving back and forth between past and present worked so well, and I loved the idea. And I loved that John was causing all the little problems to avoid the conversation about the fact that he was capable of causing little problems.

Nicely done.

[maisierita]

And I loved that John was causing all the little problems to avoid the conversation about the fact that he was capable of causing little problems.

You know, when you put it that way, it's pretty funny. :)