Fic: An Intruder in the Queen's Chamber

Jan 06, 2013 22:00

For: meekosanTitle: An Intruder in the Queen's Chamber (final gift for the secret elf exchange ( Read more... )

secret elf, fanfic, user: jeyla4ever

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kickstand75 January 7 2013, 16:45:53 UTC
Nicely done! I like how you touched upon a new "retro-virus" development, the fact that the wraith were all but wiped out with Teyla's decision to go to Michael. Love how she had flashed of remembering John and how conflicted she felt about that at first.

--k

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jeyla4ever January 7 2013, 23:05:30 UTC
Im so glad you picked that one with the retro-virus. There's so much more to tell with just that. I can so imagine John clutching at the thought but also knowing if that's the way to get her back, he'll do anything!

I went back to Conversion for that last part you mentioned. Of all the people John hurt, Teyla was the only one he didn't. So, why shouldn't it be the same the other way around. :)

Glad you like it. Thank you

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firedew1 January 7 2013, 19:30:52 UTC
Loved this, Camy! It's a very cool take on what could have happened to Teyla in Michael's clutches. Plus, I've gotta tell you, I love the way you wrote John. Desperate to get her back (wondering about the things he had to do they talked about), willing to board a Wraith vessel alone and risk another dose of the retrovirus...awesome. And with John hopped up on the retrovirus, their reunion was really quite sexy, my dear! I love how in the middle of trying to hold back his physical reaction to her, he managed to remember that getting her home to him was more important and injected her. It was SO good, sweetie!

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jeyla4ever January 7 2013, 23:09:39 UTC
Aww...coming from you that means a whole lot! You made me so happy because you got everything that I was trying to convey. Phew! I was a little fearful of making Teyla too much like this because she is such a well controlled woman. Even at her worst, she's always kept her ground.

*giggles* I had to give him a reason to want to jump her bones...retro-virus just popped into mind and it was perfect!

Yes, I do love this idea of both of them turning and then bang!!! *giggles*

There's one another significant clue here. ;)

Thank you sweetie. I know you are been too generous, but thank you! :)

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firedew1 January 7 2013, 23:39:22 UTC
Haha. I'm sure the retrovirus certainly came in handy when he had to wrestle her, but I don't think he needed the help wanting to jump her bones. In my experience, you get a man in a room with a naked woman and all bets are off. ;-)

Love you, hon!

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nacinom January 8 2013, 19:47:54 UTC
What a mysterious, sexy story! You really had me at the beginning. I had no idea who this Regina person was. I liked the way you built up the story to reveal her identity and that of the intruder in her private chambers. I think that John is wrong in thinking that Teyla's willingness to sacrifice herself for her loved ones is any different than his. They will definitely need to have a serious heart to heart conversation at some point, but what they are doing before that is certainly fun to read about.

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jeyla4ever January 9 2013, 00:06:48 UTC
Oh, I love that I kept you intrigued with the whole Teyla background. Thank you!

He sure is, but John is John and I think he'll always be like this and more so when now, he has a wife...a family to think of. He won't want to lose Teyla at all, never mind in something horrible happening to her. :) But, yes...they will have more talks and I think deep down Teyla always knows that John has always had an extra caution towards her. :)

Glad you like it. Thank you for your thoughts.

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