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WIPs, I've got a few...

May 07, 2009 23:00

Posting a couple of snippetts from the ones that have been sitting for far too long...

( Three SG-1 and Two SGA Fics )

sg-1, sga, author - cat_77, prompt - wip

Comments 5

natsuko1978 May 8 2009, 18:28:34 UTC

I read some SGA fics, but since I've only seen a dozen or so episodes, I don't feel qualified to comment. (I don't have Sky, or the money for the DVDs. Which is sad.)

For the three SG-1 fics... I'm not sure what you're looking for. The snippets certainly have me interested enough to want to read more - and want to see you finish/publish - but I'm not sure I can judge what's either needed or "off" based on such a small sample size. :(

Does that make sense? Sorry not to be more helpful; if you have any specific questions, I'll try to answer them.

cat_77 May 9 2009, 05:04:28 UTC

My major fear is falling into the realm of cliches, as well as bad writing in general.

For "Country", I keep thinking it's too over the top and having trouble getting the early season voices to not sound like late season voices, or just plain out of character all together.

"Taken" feels like that scene in general (of which I've pretty much stalled out after) is far too much of Sam is the damsel in distress and the men have to rush to save her. It's not going to turn out like that, but for something that was originally supposed to be somewhat about female empowerment, it just feels detrimental.

"Days" has been stuck at 50 pages for far longer than I'm willing to admit. My style has changed somewhat and I'm afraid it would be jarring to jump back in. It's also supposed to be somewhat subtle about Daniel wondering if it's really a dream or real or a combination or whatever, and it seems a bit heavy handed.

Any ideas? Maybe just talking about it can get me back, if that makes any sense.

cat_77 May 9 2009, 05:08:32 UTC

I also forgot to say thank you for looking at these - Thank you very much!

michelel72 May 8 2009, 23:52:23 UTC

Like natsuko1978, I'm not sure I have much useful to contribute. I'm stronger with SGA than with SG-1 myself, but the only thing that really strikes me here is that in the post-finale one, McKay's last line seems more crude than I would expect. As for pacing, that's something that I tend to judge over much longer passages than these, and I would think it could be adjusted -- at least to an extent -- once you've got the general story down. Maybe pick one particular WIP for this go-around and see if you have any specific feedback you're looking for?

cat_77 May 9 2009, 05:07:45 UTC

I think you're right about McKay - I was going for flippant, but think it comes across more like an uncaring ass or just plain rude.

I never have just one WIP going at a time - my ADD won't let me. *g* Every time I try to just work on one, I get an idea for a new one that cries for attention until I get stuck and so on and so on. Maybe one of each? Give a bit of variety/change so I don't feel as trapped in just one thing?