1. "They aren't serious, are they?" Cam groaned. "No pants? What kind of people make their visitors parade around half-naked?"
"Not quite naked," Sam grinned. "You can keep your underwear."
"Don't worry about it, Mitchell," Jackson said. "I'll do it."
Which seemed very charitable to Cam, right up until he found out that the ritual ended with Jackson surrounded by a bunch of pretty girls. In a tent. For the rest of the night.
Jackson, of course, swore that nothing happened.
2. Gretza were surprisingly vicious creatures for their size. Mouse-small, but sharp teeth. And they travelled in packs, which was something the biologists who first surveyed the planet forgot to include in their report. Cam cursed them--and the sturdy ripstop of his BDUs, which would not tear beneath those teeth--as he ran for the water with a half-dozen gretza clawing their way up his legs
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Wow. These were all really well thought out. I liked the progression from the superficial to the sillily dangerous to the personal to the serious. "We" he said, and meant a group he'd joined voluntarily, loved and fought with. We meaning him and her and their entire lives. For a man to get a place where he would want to take off that uniform--I think you did it justice, the scene. You played it right.
It was surprisingly hard to come up with ways for Cam to wish he'd lost his pants that didn't involve missed opportunities for sex. (Although I did almost go that way - five times Cam didn't get to have sex.)
Angst adds weight, doncha know? That's totally my excuse.
Thank you for commenting! I'm glad #5 was effective. It wasn't exactly obvious from the prompt, but once I started thinking about situations when he might want to change his clothing, it seemed to make sense.
Re: Five times Cam didn't lose his pants (but kinda wished he had)sidljMarch 23 2012, 03:02:12 UTC
Oh, that last one hit me right in the heart. Nicely done, but you are very evil!
As to #1, I wonder if Daniel's word can be trusted, since I highly suspect he had something to do with Cam's outfit (or his own being different, at least) in #3, which would prove his sneakiness. ;-)
1. "They aren't serious, are they?" Cam groaned. "No pants? What kind of people make their visitors parade around half-naked?"
"Not quite naked," Sam grinned. "You can keep your underwear."
"Don't worry about it, Mitchell," Jackson said. "I'll do it."
Which seemed very charitable to Cam, right up until he found out that the ritual ended with Jackson surrounded by a bunch of pretty girls. In a tent. For the rest of the night.
Jackson, of course, swore that nothing happened.
2. Gretza were surprisingly vicious creatures for their size. Mouse-small, but sharp teeth. And they travelled in packs, which was something the biologists who first surveyed the planet forgot to include in their report. Cam cursed them--and the sturdy ripstop of his BDUs, which would not tear beneath those teeth--as he ran for the water with a half-dozen gretza clawing their way up his legs ( ... )
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Also, I really like #1
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Angst adds weight, doncha know? That's totally my excuse.
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The last one was kind of heartbreaking to write.
Still haven't forgotten you, btw.
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And of course #4 is my personal favorite.
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I do have a certain fondness for #4 too. :)
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As to #1, I wonder if Daniel's word can be trusted, since I highly suspect he had something to do with Cam's outfit (or his own being different, at least) in #3, which would prove his sneakiness. ;-)
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