Prologue

Oct 30, 2003 01:11

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anonymous October 31 2004, 14:19:30 UTC
your story is horrible. The whole diary idea i don't like. It sounds like your making a bad computer game

as you requested "nerd"

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sevenstones October 31 2004, 15:01:33 UTC
if your trying to intimidate me or make me feel bad you obviously have no idea who your talking to because if you did youd know that an anymous comment would never in a thousand years have any effect on me whatsoever. also, if you were to say who you were, chances are id understand. id see where your coming from and also that your entitled to an opinion. OR if you were just rying to be a funny guy, well lets just say im surrounded by those too and well, i just dont care. yeah so whatever guys say what you want when i said i want input i meant i want input be it good or bad... one more thing, if this is chris your uncircumsized, no one cares about your opinions

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live_suicide May 30 2005, 12:39:26 UTC
"you're." it's spelled "you're." "your" implies ownership, as in "your writing is terrible. "you're" is a contraction of "you" and "are," as in "if you're trying to become a writer, give up, because your writing is terrible."

thank you.

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Revision? anonymous October 31 2004, 18:28:54 UTC
The sentence: "When I told Alicia, ya know, mom, she was so mad!" is the only sentence I don't think works. Just take out the "ya know", and it would work.

07 buddy: letter B

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forlovers_ November 6 2004, 12:49:53 UTC
i actually like this. <33

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