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FIC: What We Are or Might Have Been (5/?)

Jun 26, 2011 16:42

Title: What We Are or Might Have Been (5/?)
Author: Seraphtrevs ( My Fic Masterlist)
Pairing: Mohinder/Sylar
Rating: R
Genre: Tragicomedy
Word Count: (this part) ~5850
Warnings: Contains depictions of characters suffering from mental illness
Disclaimer: Not mine, no profit made, etc.
Summary: Sequel to Down To This. Company man Sylar has brought ( Read more... )

my fic, mylar, fic: what we are or might have been

Comments 10

gaiafaye June 27 2011, 01:08:43 UTC

OH MY GOD the elaborate CIA cover-up had me face-palming with laughter. Though I guess now Sylar has Ed in the palm of his hand if he ever needs help with a dead body. A dead terrorist body, of course.

Sylar totally got the jello mold recipe from some old Stepford-wifey 1950s cookbook. It's all the rage at the block parties!

Of course, he's all pissy after Mohinder's and Peter's conversation. To think, all Sylar really needed was a hug. Such fuss for something as simple as that.

I love how you have Sylar think about the way Peter behaves, as pure performance. Peter sounds sympathetic, Sylar tries to sound comforting like Peter does. It echoes back to his discussion with Bennet, basically that Sylar has very little empathy.

Before he had a chance to respond, she continued. “But it’s really the other way around - I need you to keep an eye on him.”

Tricky, tricky, Angela. She's a quick thinker.

“If you want to fuck me, all you have to do is say so. I don’t require seducing.”Um, even though I knew Sylar sucks at the actual-emotion- ( ... )

seraphtrevs June 27 2011, 06:23:58 UTC

Lol, I'm glad you liked the ~CIA cover-up!~ It was actually a late addition. I feel really bad for poor Ed; he's just trying to be a good neighbor.

Sylar totally got the jello mold recipe from some old Stepford-wifey 1950s cookbook. It's all the rage at the block parties!

Ahahaha, YES. Sylar loves all of the grossest 1950s American food, because I imagine that's what Virginia liked to cook. Lol, and now I'm imagining him trying to throw a block party. I bet Ed would come.

I love how you have Sylar think about the way Peter behaves, as pure performance. Peter sounds sympathetic, Sylar tries to sound comforting like Peter does. It echoes back to his discussion with Bennet, basically that Sylar has very little empathy.

I'm glad that worked for you! I wanted to reiterate how Sylar is still basically faking it, even if there might be a glimmer of true feeling underneath it all. I'm glad you were reminded of the earlier conversation with Bennet - hooray, continuity!

Tricky, tricky, Angela. She's a quick thinker.Lol, ( ... )

alicambs June 27 2011, 08:10:33 UTC

Ouch! I guess this is pay back time for Sylar. Manipulate people all the time and they won't believe you when you are actually trying to be genuine!

seraphtrevs June 27 2011, 17:18:08 UTC

Exactly! He's the Boy Who Cried "No Seriously, You Guys, I'm Good for Real Now, Really."

starrdust411 June 27 2011, 16:06:15 UTC

I knew that Sylar wouldn't be able to have Peter in the house without getting jealous. Although him trying to imitate Peter's "technique" was hilarious. Poor Sylar. He needs more work in the art of empathy.

I felt so bad for poor Mohinder at his "I’m probably at my least repulsive" comment. I know he was being a bit harsh to Sylar, but it just made me sad for him.

I'm so sleepy right now, I'm sorry I couldn't leave a more detailed and coherent review, but I'm glad to see an update. I can't wait to see what happens next :)

seraphtrevs June 27 2011, 17:34:33 UTC

Hee, yes. Sylar really can't help it at this point. I'm glad you liked Sylar trying to imitate Peter - I was all "lol," but also "awww :(" when I was writing it. Poor Sylar. He just doesn't get it.

And yeah, also poor Mohinder. He's in such a bad place right now, and Sylar certainly isn't helping.

And aw, don't worry about it! I love your detailed comments, but it's also just good to hear that you read it and enjoyed it. :D

levitatethis June 27 2011, 23:26:46 UTC

Once again you wonderfully walk that line between drama and humour. True to the characters, Sylar would feel jealousy towards Peter and the ease it seems that exists between him and Mohinder. I like the methodical way Sylar attempts to analyze Peter's behaviour, as if he can teach himself to be "human" and break through to Mohinder.

The conflict between Sylar/Peter, Sylar/Mohinder, Sylar/Bennett (hell, Sylar/everyone) works to show the disconnect he feels, still an outsider in his own life. Yet there are moments of understanding and when he stops trying to be something he's not, when he just loses his cool and lays it out there on the table he finally makes a bit of headway with Mohinder.

seraphtrevs June 28 2011, 05:56:42 UTC

I like the methodical way Sylar attempts to analyze Peter's behaviour, as if he can teach himself to be "human" and break through to Mohinder.

I'm glad you liked it! It's been kind of a challenge walking the line between sociopath!Sylar and the person he really is trying to become. There are real feelings there, but he has no access to them, and thinks that it's all a matter of doing the "right" things.

. Yet there are moments of understanding and when he stops trying to be something he's not, when he just loses his cool and lays it out there on the table he finally makes a bit of headway with Mohinder.

Yes, exactly. The only way there can be anything real between them is if Sylar loses the control he's so intent on keeping (which he does in a major way next chapter). (But no Mohinders are harmed in the production of the next chapter, lol.)

regazzadilupo June 30 2011, 07:50:23 UTC

I really like Sylar's cover story. It sort of smacks of a touch of his intuitive aptitude- one look at all the things Ed's put about his home and he new how Ed *worked*.

Why could Peter forgive himself and encourage Mohinder to do the same, and yet continue to treat Sylar like a monster? It wasn’t fair.

And this? You know, this is something that seriously bothered me. Peter got the Hunger from Sylar, and understood it viscerally... but it still took forever and a freaking mental prison for him to have an ounce of sympathy for Sylar. All Sylar needs is a hug, and your brains. Is that too much to ask??

seraphtrevs July 1 2011, 05:38:55 UTC

It sort of smacks of a touch of his intuitive aptitude- one look at all the things Ed's put about his home and he new how Ed *worked*.

Yes, exactly! I don't know if that's how the writers of the show intended it, but I always thought his spectacular bullshitting abilities were a function of his IA.

You know, this is something that seriously bothered me. Peter got the Hunger from Sylar, and understood it viscerally... but it still took forever and a freaking mental prison for him to have an ounce of sympathy for Sylar. I know, right? That was what I assumed the intention was when they gave Peter Sylar's powers (that is, to make Peter sympathetic to Sylar), but once they decided Sylar wasn't a Petrelli after all, they dropped it pretty quickly ( ... )