Comments | sequitur_fic: FIC: The Third Day (Tony, Gibbs, Team, OC, R)

sequitur_fic

FIC: The Third Day (Tony, Gibbs, Team, OC, R)

Oct 01, 2007 16:23

( He didn’t think about it because he knew the consequences of it: knew that Lucas had wrenched his neck around so that he was always looking backwards now, knew that his sense of time was now painfully out of joint, knew that if let himself realize it, he’d know that he was seeing Pete’s lab in his head and not Abby’s. But Tony had a good handle on what he did and did not let himself know and so he let it slip away from him into the dark, along with his knowledge of how he had looked to Gibbs as easily as a compass turned north. There were some things he just didn’t need to know. )

my fic, ncis, the third day

Comments 33

sea_yeah October 1 2007, 20:50:46 UTC

*is a blubbering wreck*

I just...it...Tony...they...

O.O

What happened?!?! *whimper*

sequitur_fic October 3 2007, 02:30:16 UTC

Don't worry--there will be a couple of important flashbacks later to help you figure out how much Tony does/doesn't remember!

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sequitur_fic October 3 2007, 02:31:00 UTC

That is an absolutely wonderful threat for Lucas. Ziva-worthy, in fact.

And don't worry! The next part will be up very soon!

donutsweeper October 1 2007, 21:15:13 UTC

oooh.. hooray, more Pete! But oooh, I'm hooked, I can't wait to read the rest of this story!

Loved the way you described Tony's faint/panic attack

sequitur_fic October 3 2007, 02:32:56 UTC

Thanks! I figure that if I bring in Lucas, I should at least bring in a good part of Tony's past to balance it out. And I'm glad the fainting spell rang true for you. That's a tricky thing to describe.

donutsweeper October 4 2007, 01:15:09 UTC

Love, love, love this. Just wanted to mention that on my 10th read I noticed a typo "Tony wondered hos long Pete had known." Don't mean to be pushy, but I hate it when that sort of thing happens in my fics.

sequitur_fic October 6 2007, 14:08:23 UTC

Oh, thanks! Fixed it. I can't believe I just missed that red line in spellcheck!

wordwitch October 1 2007, 21:28:34 UTC

I like that you're continuing this story, which I had - the word enjoyed doesn't contain enough pain to describe my admiration of it.

I like that things are moving so quickly even while they seem to be slogging through molasses.

I like that Gibbs' defense of Tony is so immediate, and so immediately followed by everyone else's.

I am eager to find out what happens next.

sequitur_fic October 3 2007, 02:34:43 UTC

Wow, thank you so much! I'm trying to keep this moving along while remembering that old saying about a novel "not being a bicycle ride but a feast of many courses," and I'm glad the rhythm of it is working for you. And I love writing the big scenes where everyone jumps in to defend Tony. I hope I can keep you interested--the next part will be up soon!

semirose October 1 2007, 22:24:51 UTC

Oh Tony

Absolutely fantastic and so powerful, you just hurt so bad for Tony.

sequitur_fic October 3 2007, 02:35:31 UTC

Thank you so much. I think I can promise that Tony will get at least one hug during the course of the story, so at least that's something working in his favor.