FIC: Ten Nonlinear Moves (Tony, team, PG)
I must have rewatched the early scenes in "Shalom" at least twenty times in the process of trying to make this story feel like an accurate portrayal of Tony's team leadership, and I think this might be my favorite of my short stories. It's also quintessential Snapple Angst (the term I use to describe a mix of angst and banter). Written to fill
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“It’s a flowchart of revenge,” Abby says. McGee and Ziva nod enthusiastically.
Tony tries to remember that these people are well-educated, full-grown adults who help him solve crimes. They help protect the nation.
I had to stop reading to wipe my eyes from laughing too hard.
This really did fill the gap between seasons. Great job :) funny, witty dialogue, but with underlying tones of pure team love :)
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This could have been in the show--SHOULD have been in the show. It does more to showcase Tony's character than this whole season has, and the P'sTB have given more thought to his character this season than ever before.
This: "What matters is that someone made her bleed, someone hit her, someone hurt her. He wants badly to be able to say this, to pull this guy’s head up off the parking lot and explain that no one hurts Ziva, no hurts McGee, no one hurts Abby, no one hurts Ducky, no one hurts Lee-they’re his. They’re all his and if they’re bleeding, so is he."--made me bleed a little too. And that Ziva knew, they all knew how dangerous he was in that moment, yet he felt he had to *apologize* to her--God, so powerful.
And yes, the humor was great too, and perfectly in character, and balanced the drama wonderfully, just as it does in the best of the episodes.
So, what your were trying to do with this story? You succeeded.
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Yes, they've all gone a little insane, but it had so many funny moments that had me laughing out loud :). Yet there were also heartfelt moments that really highlighted just how far they'd go for each other and the odd introspective and angsty moment thrown in for good measure too.
Great stuff.
Laura.
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The world needs more Boss!Tony.
And because I'm too incoherent to make actual comments, my favorite lines (also a convenient excuse to read it all again) - with the odd comment thrown in:
grab bags of neuroses and homicidal rage and loyalty
“Palmer! Snakes on a Plane, midnight premiere.”
“Yes, Tony, absolutely,” Palmer says, and knocks something over.
All of FOUR.
Tony emailed a friend-of-a-friend who did armchair psychology, and was told that either they were doing their best to create order in the vacuum they had been left in, or they had all read the same article on cubicle decorations.
Abby (...) is tallying up the number of times they have all been injured in an effort to reassure herself that they are very durable people
“No,” McGee says. “They’re too scared of you, boss.”
Personally, I think Tony-The-Boss is a lot scarier than Gibbs. Gibbs at least appeared to be sane. (most of the time).
“McGee, if this is another one of those things where you’re trying to figure out how many people have to ( ... )
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his team is made up of angry, emotionally fragile people that like individual attention.
So much YES. It's sad, but it's true. And it also kind of works for them.
And any observation, or rather reflection like that seems wildely out of character for regular Tony (in my opinion) - his brain may note these things down somewhere, but he doesn't ever really look at that. Except now that he's the Boss, he has to look at those things. And because he's Tony and he's awesome, he doesn't reflect on that any further than he has to, doesn't try to fix it, just works with it. They're his team and they are what and who they are - and it's his job to manage them properly.
(huh. apparently I still have enough brain power left to write long rambling commentary on characters. go figure.)
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