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pregnantcigar May 6 2010, 06:24:09 UTC
this was a really good one. cokecane, yours was brilliant. and sansmerci lmao you are so obvious XD ♥ congrats!

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paintingseas May 6 2010, 07:25:56 UTC
ah well, i'm glad i got the chance to try again anyway :3 thanks for all the critique through this challenge, i wish every writer the best of luck! take care everyone, don't forget to eat healthy and sleep well! ♥

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subtleslide May 6 2010, 13:44:42 UTC
Congrats sansmerci! I really liked yours.

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quinnsan May 6 2010, 19:17:15 UTC
Well at least I got another chance. I'm sorry my grammar isn't perfect, it never has been my strong point.

I may not be perfect, but I am damn proud of what I wrote. Because it makes sense to me. I don't give a damn about cliches and I'll admit I am an amateur, there is no doubt about it. Also, it wasn't supposed to make any sense.

I hope no one things I'm angry or anything, cause I got over that last night after reading the comments (I sometimes can be overly defensive of my writing, so I'll go through a stage of anger and then I'll accept, thats just how I am). I appreciate the criticism because it will help me become better.

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onew May 6 2010, 19:37:38 UTC

my two cents about cliches: they're fine as long as you're able to present them in a way that won't make them seem cliche. when you think about it, everything everyone's ever written can be considered cliche since the plot has, one way or another, been used countless of times already, but you will be able to capture the attention of a reader so long as you are able to "twist" the cliche.

"Also, it wasn't supposed to make any sense." then you won't be able to tell your story well. a story must always make sense, else writing it will be a lame attempt at getting something across (for lack of a better term). your story always has to make sense to others, too.

nevertheless, good luck with your future writings and congratulations for coming this far. hope to see you in the future!

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penguinhyun May 6 2010, 20:48:50 UTC
thanks everyone ♥ ♥ and i realize now that 30ml sesame oil is way too much ._. i made a bunch of alterations to the recipe i have and randomly forgot to alter that value OTL

also, screenbias, yours is such a delight to read and it makes me happy every time. :D

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