Oh wow, Semby. These two ficlets are absolutely amazing. So well done on both of them. You have terrific voices and really unusual pairings and settings and you make them work so well. I love, love, love the Connor and Darla one (of course) partly because I wish it comes true for him and partly because I know it never will. The word 'mama' just breaks my heart into itty bitty pieces for them both. And I love that they discuss Angel and come to a place of healing. And even so, I came to you at different times, in different places, different worlds. I judge you less now, I forgive you now, because of the forgiveness I had for him at the end of it all. ::takes a moment to breath:: Gorgeous-ness. This time she’ll be the one to tremble when he calls her “mama” and neither of them will question why.Oh please make it happen PtB
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Wow, so much pretty feedback! You're making me blush. The Connor and Darla one was one that I felt had so much potential, but I wasn't really sure I'd pulled it off in the end, so to hear that it gave you such emotional reactions is really gratifying :) That line you picked out with "different times, different places" was certainly meaningful but felt the most awkward to me, but I let it through because it was a surreal, dreamlike thing anyway. And I'm glad the end of the Buffy and Lindsey one came off as creepy. Thank you oodles for your responses :)
That line you picked out with "different times, different places" was certainly meaningful but felt the most awkward to me, but I let it through because it was a surreal, dreamlike thing anyway. Connor, for me, is all about the struggle - he struggles against Angel, he struggles to live in LA, when he's been in Quor-Toth etc. So it makes sense to me that he would struggle to get the 'right' words out, to make sense of a sentence, if you see what I mean. That's what I liked about it :)
Oh. Dude. DUDE. All of these. So. Much. Love right here, semby. Right now. Dude!
I'm especially in love with the Darla,Connor one. I love how it's in future tense, because no one can do that properly, and yet you just did. I love how it's all about Angel, really. And how Connor longs for it to happen...but can go on without it, too. If you do ever consider cleaning it up or doing more with it, I'm right here to beta if you want.
Love the Gunn one also. That's just perfect, the full circle back to the streets. Hadn't thought about it that way, and you did a good job with it.
And the Lindsey one worked because it was so...surreal. I'd love to see more of that. The "Hey, maybe you should - that’s starting to be a problem.”--works so well; I can just see him bleeding out and you don't even have to say it, and it's...dream-like and strangely painful.
And the Anya and Tara in heaven on is just funny ;o)
Oh, man. Darla, Connor had to be in the future tense, but you have no idea how much of a pain that was. Especially when referring to things that had happened in the past. I was like "It's very confusing and probably wrong and should be beta'ed but I really don't have the energy to deal with it!" And if you would be willing to beta, I'd certainly be willing to work on it sometime down the line... you know, after I'm done with the, uh... four? ficathons I've got lined up now. And possibly after graduation. Ugh.
I know future tense is a bitch. I've tried it, and given up. Which is why I'm so...overwhelmingly impressed with this ficlet right now. As far as that goes, there's nothing I'd change. But there are a few character things you could say--push a little harder, dig a little deeper--that could really make this ficlet sing in a brilliant way. It kinda does already, it's just rouch around the edges.
So, when you do feel like it, after graduation (I was so stressed last semester senior year of college; I know what you're going through!), whenever, lemme know if you still want me and I'm so there.
Here via lillianmorgan. I really like your drabbles!
The Tara & Anya one had great voices and is so funny! And the Gunn one is very poignant.
The Connor & Darla fic is excellent. It makes sense that Connor would want that talk to his mother and try to understand.
This is so in character that Connor suspects he'll never get a chance for a tender moment with his 'mama' (lovely word choice), and that he'll never get the answers:
So maybe they’ll never meet that day, and maybe he’ll never call her “mama,” but he’ll know what could have been, and what they would have said to each other, and he’ll understand why things had to happen the way they did.
And that will have been enough.
The Buffy & Lindsey piece is creepy, good creepy. And I love the last line.
Semby, darling, hello. This is Elise -- you beta'd my story, 'The Dark Side of the Moon' some time ago, and I've always wanted to return the favor (in a way) by reading your work, knowing it will be a stellar ride. And here I've finally found the time! So here we go. I hope you don't mind comment spams, but if you do, hopefully you catch me early on. :)
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Drabble One: Melancholy and truly great. I'm especially in love with the final line, and its very finality.
Drabble Two: *giggles*
'Maybe Someday':
And he’ll call her “mama,” and he won’t know why, because he’s never called anyone that before
Yes, exactly. I love the truth in that sliver of reality.
Blood connections will still mean something to her, but birthrights never did.
It's as if you've grasped Darla in the entirety of one sentence. Pulled her conscious thought out of her presence that's all been staked away.
Even after all the time that will have passed and his having made something of himself, he’ll wonder what she thought was so worthwhile about him to
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Hey! Wow, that was a lot of notifications in my email ;) I don't mind comment spam at all - it makes me feel very appreciated! Thank you so much. Also, good to hear from you again!
I'm really glad you enjoyed all of these - particularly the Darla/Connor. That one meant a lot to me at the time, it was a very emotional piece, so I'm glad to hear it touched you on such a personal level too.
Wow, that was a lot of notifications in my email ;)
Hehe! Yes, I uh... when I get a project going, especially the one called project feedback, it can be an overwhelming thing. I'm glad it makes you feel appreciated. :)
I'm really glad you enjoyed all of these - particularly the Darla/Connor.
My relationship with my daughter is far from the norm, which I have wished every day to have with her. So I can identify strongly with Connor's plight, and yes, this fic showed it in phenomenal shades.
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I love, love, love the Connor and Darla one (of course) partly because I wish it comes true for him and partly because I know it never will. The word 'mama' just breaks my heart into itty bitty pieces for them both. And I love that they discuss Angel and come to a place of healing.
And even so, I came to you at different times, in different places, different worlds. I judge you less now, I forgive you now, because of the forgiveness I had for him at the end of it all.
::takes a moment to breath:: Gorgeous-ness.
This time she’ll be the one to tremble when he calls her “mama” and neither of them will question why.Oh please make it happen PtB ( ... )
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The Connor and Darla one was one that I felt had so much potential, but I wasn't really sure I'd pulled it off in the end, so to hear that it gave you such emotional reactions is really gratifying :) That line you picked out with "different times, different places" was certainly meaningful but felt the most awkward to me, but I let it through because it was a surreal, dreamlike thing anyway.
And I'm glad the end of the Buffy and Lindsey one came off as creepy.
Thank you oodles for your responses :)
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Connor, for me, is all about the struggle - he struggles against Angel, he struggles to live in LA, when he's been in Quor-Toth etc. So it makes sense to me that he would struggle to get the 'right' words out, to make sense of a sentence, if you see what I mean. That's what I liked about it :)
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I'm especially in love with the Darla,Connor one. I love how it's in future tense, because no one can do that properly, and yet you just did. I love how it's all about Angel, really. And how Connor longs for it to happen...but can go on without it, too. If you do ever consider cleaning it up or doing more with it, I'm right here to beta if you want.
Love the Gunn one also. That's just perfect, the full circle back to the streets. Hadn't thought about it that way, and you did a good job with it.
And the Lindsey one worked because it was so...surreal. I'd love to see more of that. The "Hey, maybe you should - that’s starting to be a problem.”--works so well; I can just see him bleeding out and you don't even have to say it, and it's...dream-like and strangely painful.
And the Anya and Tara in heaven on is just funny ;o)
Wonderful job, thanks for sharing.
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Oh, man. Darla, Connor had to be in the future tense, but you have no idea how much of a pain that was. Especially when referring to things that had happened in the past. I was like "It's very confusing and probably wrong and should be beta'ed but I really don't have the energy to deal with it!" And if you would be willing to beta, I'd certainly be willing to work on it sometime down the line... you know, after I'm done with the, uh... four? ficathons I've got lined up now. And possibly after graduation. Ugh.
And I'm glad you liked the others as well :)
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So, when you do feel like it, after graduation (I was so stressed last semester senior year of college; I know what you're going through!), whenever, lemme know if you still want me and I'm so there.
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The Tara & Anya one had great voices and is so funny! And the Gunn one is very poignant.
The Connor & Darla fic is excellent. It makes sense that Connor would want that talk to his mother and try to understand.
This is so in character that Connor suspects he'll never get a chance for a tender moment with his 'mama' (lovely word choice), and that he'll never get the answers:
So maybe they’ll never meet that day, and maybe he’ll never call her “mama,” but he’ll know what could have been, and what they would have said to each other, and he’ll understand why things had to happen the way they did.
And that will have been enough.
The Buffy & Lindsey piece is creepy, good creepy. And I love the last line.
Thanks!
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Drabble One: Melancholy and truly great. I'm especially in love with the final line, and its very finality.
Drabble Two: *giggles*
'Maybe Someday':
And he’ll call her “mama,” and he won’t know why, because he’s never called anyone that before
Yes, exactly. I love the truth in that sliver of reality.
Blood connections will still mean something to her, but birthrights never did.
It's as if you've grasped Darla in the entirety of one sentence. Pulled her conscious thought out of her presence that's all been staked away.
Even after all the time that will have passed and his having made something of himself, he’ll wonder what she thought was so worthwhile about him to ( ... )
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I'm really glad you enjoyed all of these - particularly the Darla/Connor. That one meant a lot to me at the time, it was a very emotional piece, so I'm glad to hear it touched you on such a personal level too.
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Hehe! Yes, I uh... when I get a project going, especially the one called project feedback, it can be an overwhelming thing. I'm glad it makes you feel appreciated. :)
I'm really glad you enjoyed all of these - particularly the Darla/Connor.
My relationship with my daughter is far from the norm, which I have wished every day to have with her. So I can identify strongly with Connor's plight, and yes, this fic showed it in phenomenal shades.
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