Ketchup - Week 1

[seeds_of_chaos]

                  Bodies slamming against each other, screaming, singing, and above all, the roar of the guitar.  The air smelled of sweat and pot, and I was carefully avoiding any flailing limbs, keeping an eye on my smaller friend in front of me, who was having the time of her life.  We’d lost Lauren in the crowd; I was a little worried, but we’d

Comments

[violettango]

I liked the way that you alternated between the real world and the world of the game that you were playing (Mass Effect) in the first piece of your post. It was good that you didn't write a long and flowery description for what was going on in the real world as you were playing the game; it would have weighed the piece down. And I liked your reaction at the end of the piece, it made me laugh out loud!

What concert were you seeing when you were 13? Sounds like an intense experience.

[seeds_of_chaos]

Thanks! I was kind of proud of it too :] I can't really write a flowery description of my room anyway; it's usually a mess :P

It was the 89x Birthday Bash. Pretty much a small band festival hosted by a local rock station. I didn't really know what mosh pits were at the time. Whoops.