The Consequence of Loyalty - Expanded File Affair 13/11/2015

[otherhawk]

Not entirely certain where this one was going although I do have a few of the later bits in my head. Mostly I just had this scene so any opinions would be welcomed. :)

The Consequence of Loyalty

Illya walked out of the restaurant and immediately spotted the black sedan idling on the other side of the street, its tinted windows giving nothing away

Comments

[mrua7]

Fabulous! More!

[otherhawk]

Thank you - there will be more if I ever figure out exactly what it is.... :)

[laurose8]

An excellent idea, most well written. I love the piano beginning and ending; and the suspense and action are very strong.

[otherhawk]

Oh, thank you! Action scenes aren't really my strong point, so I'm glad this seemed okay.

[jkkitty]

Won't hold my breath about Napoleon not finding out. Nice job

[otherhawk]

No, I think he's being overly-optimistic there for certain. Thank you.

[lindafishes8]

Yikes! Illya stood his ground while protecting his dinner. At least he keeps his priorities straight. LOL! Can't wait for another installment. Great so far.

[otherhawk]

Yep! The dinner thing was only partly about getting the opportunity to grab the lid. The food is always important too.

Not sure when there'll be another installment of this, I'm really not clear on what happens next, or even if this is actually the beginning of the story!

[anonymous]

Great story, always love your stuff - quite brilliant really. Especially loved " ... if he shot a fellow ... if he shot a KGB officer ...". Wonder how often that slip occurs ? See, brilliant.

[otherhawk]

Oh, thanks - and I'm especially glad you liked that line, because I did. I think it would be something he might struggle with in the early days.