After the Fall: Chapter 4 (Roy x Ed)

[seaweed_fma]

Title: After the Fall, Chapter 4

Comments

[lynx212]

Poor Edo I can only imagine how humiliating that had to be.

Bravo on the interesting write the scene played out wonderfully!!

[asm613]

if the shirt was almost at ed's knees; how is it that his private parts were visible when the pants fell? and why would he put dry clothes over damp underwear? makes no sense. i think roy should have been in his robe and ed just in a big shirt(unless roy owned 2 robes). but i like where this story seems to be heading.

[nomdeplume13]

I like the image of Ed accidentally being de-pantsed, but you might want to consider the length of the shirt, or possibly make it white, getting wet from the underclothes, still leaving nothing to the imagination. Still, this is very good.

[chibibble]

Uh, afraid I have to agree with everyone else here, stereotypical as it is.

Still, very good.

Love your writing style.